<p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">天通苑诗联学会</b></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:20px;"> 课对练习</b></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">时值中秋，桂花盛开，以"咏桂花”为同题撰联。每人一副，字数单边7~16字以内。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;">刘胜青出题并点评</b></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></b></p> <p class="ql-block">1.赵天才</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">千树桂花开晓露；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">一帘香气入秋风。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">2.. 董卫星</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">金粟飘香，满树中秋花正好；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">玉技弄影，半庭清夜露初凝。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">3.花丽珍</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">十里芳枝，朵朵流香迎中秋夜；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">一庭金粟，丝丝逸韵染素霜天。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"> 素/形容词，改半/数词以宽品中/方位词。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block">4.吕木香</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">露浥琼英，一树芳魂邀皓月；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">风飘桂馥，千重雅意满闲庭。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">5.赵爱群</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">满树桂花收眼底；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">金秋嘉节展情怀。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"> 怀/名词，与底/方位词失品。改情怀为怀中。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">6.陈敏</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">庭前金桂香穿户；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">叶底黄英影曳风。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"> 黄英与金桂，义合掌。改金桂为白苑。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block">7.周耀君</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">金风玉露桂香坠；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">中秋良夜月华盈。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"> 秋/平，与风/平失对。夜/仄，与露/仄失对。月/仄，与桂/仄失对。中/方位词，可改良为半/数词宽品。下句平起平收，声调合律。上句应是仄起仄收，改为：</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;">玉露金风香气溢；</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">8. 缑秦君</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">绽粟披金，不与群芳争艳；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">凝香抱露，长随皓月同輝。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">9.李居欣</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">金粟缀枝，一夜秋风香满月；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">清辉流影，千家灯火醉中秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block">10.孙桂花</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">月浸金英香绕院，</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">风牵桂影韵铺阶。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">11.龙正全</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">金风送桂香千里；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">皓月铺辉朗万家。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:15px;"> 金改爽/形容词，与皓/形容词相品。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">12.薛桂华</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">香飘十里，花开一树梅应妒；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">月照万家，酒溢千樽岁自华。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block">13.崔大年</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">故乡强胜，吴公敬贺桂花酒；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">龙裔狂欢，嫦女赞吟月背车。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">14.蔡杏荣</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">清芬暗度三秋月；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">冷艳轻摇一院风。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p><p class="ql-block">15.刘胜青</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">独占三秋，月下香无迹；</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">平分一苑，风前蕊满枝。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;">二十四诗品续诗品第二十五</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">即景</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"><br></span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">【诗曰】</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">混元运物，流而不住。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">迎之未来，揽之已去。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">诗如化工，即景成趣。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">逝者如斯，有新无故。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">因物赋形，随影换步。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">彼胶柱者，将朝认暮。</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"><br></span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">【题解】</span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"> 此品言外在的景对诗歌创作的作用与意义。全品意思大致是:自然万物，流动不居。人的灵思也飘忽若此。欲找寻它，却总迎不来，欲挽留它，则已消逝远去。诗歌创作其实是一场化工活动，眼前景一旦触动灵觉，即景生情，情景交融，也就涉笔成趣。随着时间的流走，情景交融的事儿也总会时过境迁。所以就“即景”而言，必须有随物赋形、移步换景、时时更新的觉识，不能胶柱鼓瑟，一成不变。 </span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"><br></span></span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor">摘自《二十四诗品续诗品》一书。</span></span></p>