1.七绝·教师节<br data-filtered="filtered">许根明（河南）<br data-filtered="filtered">三尺讲台传道业，一支粉笔写春秋。<br data-filtered="filtered">蚕丝吐尽育桃李，烛泪成灰硕果收。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br>【编辑但宁点评】立意端正，对仗工整，选用意象经典通俗，适合节日诵读。不足之处是意象缺少独出心裁。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">2.七绝·秋雨（回文诗）<br data-filtered="filtered">张淑红<br data-filtered="filtered">纷纷落叶沾秋雨，雨打花魂不忍闻。<br data-filtered="filtered">闻得秋声霜染鬓，鬓笺梦笔思纷纷。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br>【编辑但宁点评】采用顶针回环体，句尾勾连，章法精巧。落叶秋雨铺就清冷秋景，由景入情，生发岁月感。“鬓笺”造词新颖，唯“鬓笺”稍生僻，品读需要稍加揣摩。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">3.七绝·赏辽宁博物馆玉猪龙<br data-filtered="filtered">鄢一丹<br data-filtered="filtered">红山岫玉衍龙悠，豕首环躯玦若钩。<br data-filtered="filtered">礼器通灵涵太古，凝瞳一瞬五千秋。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br>【编辑但宁点评】：咏物佳作。前两句写实，精准描摹玉猪龙外形；后两句由器物怀古，“凝瞳一瞬五千秋”虚实相融，把文物厚重的历史感写活，气韵沉厚。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">4.卜算子·花雨问<br data-filtered="filtered">马文琪<br data-filtered="filtered">雨若不恭临，花借何来哺。小苑群芳怎得荣，心语难倾诉。<br data-filtered="filtered">花若不争妍，雨向何方赴。串串凝情不肯停，只为群芳渡。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br>【编辑但宁点评】以问答构思，借花与雨互问，托物寓理。花雨彼此成就，暗含奉献共生的哲思，语言清新灵动，构思别致，情景相融。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">5.卜算子·石泉问<br data-filtered="filtered">马文琪<br data-filtered="filtered">石若不相邻，泉向何君诉。寄语潺潺绕翠峦，独把心言吐。<br data-filtered="filtered">泉若不相携，石为何人驻。独立高岩望岁迁，共把光阴度。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】本词牌共有七种格式，作品采用的格式是 格一苏轼（缺月挂疏桐）：双调四十四字，前后段各四句、两仄韵，词格准确。构思比较巧妙，不是单方面咏物，泉与石以拟人化的手法双向互问互答，一动一静，反差相生。隐喻知己相伴，岁月相守。感谢赐稿！<div><br data-filtered="filtered">6.辽博览古<br data-filtered="filtered">雷雳<br data-filtered="filtered">千珍荟萃沈城盈，万代英华一馆藏。<br data-filtered="filtered">玉琢红山涵古意，图摹宋鹤寄高情。<br data-filtered="filtered">缂丝织锦流光润，彩卷描容焕秀明。<br data-filtered="filtered">一殿融和诸族迹，辽源文脉永扬声。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】藏字用韵错误。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">7.〔越调·小桃红〕辽博观宝<br data-filtered="filtered">雷雳<br data-filtered="filtered">众函收尽古辽疆，璞起岑山样。简册丹青焕清亮。阅沧茫，金罍彩瓷留遗像。墨痕未冷，灵辉摇荡，百载续华章。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】全曲意境厚重，借辽博文物咏叹历史，“墨痕未冷，灵辉摇荡”很有穿透力，兼具历史沧桑感与昂扬向上的气势，赞！</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">8.七律·回首<br data-filtered="filtered">雷雳<br data-filtered="filtered">往事如烟忆旧疆，韶华渐远鬓添霜。<br data-filtered="filtered">曾怀壮志驰千里，独抱清吟醉一觞。<br data-filtered="filtered">岁月催人情未老，风尘砺骨意犹长。<br data-filtered="filtered">诗书作伴初心在，笑看斜阳韵自扬。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确，中二联对仗工整。起承转合自然流畅，首联起笔抒怀，往事如烟，颔联今昔对比，曾壮志今悠然，颈联是全篇精神所在，旷达而坚毅，尾联收束的洒脱自然！一篇回首佳作，感谢赐稿！</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">9.水调歌头•香湖秋韵（毛滂体）<br data-filtered="filtered">张清彬（辽宁）<br data-filtered="filtered">澄水涵天碧，远野拥苍稠。平桥横卧，一川清景入双眸。点点残荷浮翠，列列高林凝黛，风软送清秋。镜里云痕淡，物态自悠悠。<div>凭岸望，尘虑歇，意难收。秋光正好，不必寻醉向芳洲。静赏烟波如绣，坐看晴光铺野，心共水长流。胜境天然画，逸步乐无休。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，这首词以毛滂体写香湖秋景，上片写景，层次分明， 下片抒情，旷达超然。画面感强：远近、动静搭配，湖水、桥、残荷、林木等景物排布错落有序。感谢赐稿！</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">10.五绝·辽博馆藏.徽宗草书千字文<br data-filtered="filtered">曲毅平<br data-filtered="filtered">运笔挥千里，雕龙势万钧。<br data-filtered="filtered">文飞三尺壁，帖法意通神。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，主题扣题，立意聚焦书法气势，短小凝练，抓住草书飞扬磅礴的神韵。感谢赐稿！</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">11.七律·咏秋桂<br data-filtered="filtered">韩东林<br data-filtered="filtered">秋风拂槛散芳清，首报佳音待露生。<br data-filtered="filtered">何必蟾宫期折桂，已知花圃见飞英。<br data-filtered="filtered">疏枝暗许三更月，浓馥能飘十里坪。<br data-filtered="filtered">笑问诗仙来赏否，南山香气可驱酲。<br data-filtered="filtered">引用李白《咏桂》句：安知南山桂，绿叶垂芳根。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，语言凝练，对仗工稳，用典自然，层次分明：首联点花开时节，颔联借神话典故，颈联写花态花香，尾联引诗仙相问，层层递进。感谢赐稿！</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">12.七律·咏辽宁省博物馆<br data-filtered="filtered">韩东林<br data-filtered="filtered">绵延辽水蕴长泓，古韵悠然忆远耕。<br data-filtered="filtered">燕赵青铜凝气脉，晋唐缃素写贤英。<br data-filtered="filtered">寻踪瑞鹤云天啸，觅迹红山玉器呈。<br data-filtered="filtered">一馆欣观千载史，凭栏静读岁峥嵘。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，对仗工稳，气象宏阔。燕赵青铜、晋唐书卷、瑞鹤图、红山玉器，都是辽博标志性内容，紧扣主题。感谢赐稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div></div></div></div></div></div>