<p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">题跋：丙午元宵，恰逢月食。古以为异，今叹奇观，小诗一首，记此良夜，聊寄赏心。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">五绝·戏吟</b></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">（平水韵）</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">元宵逢月食，古谓此为邪。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">今说奇难遇，相呼赏丽葩。</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">Al豆包点评：</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一、格律与押韵（平水韵·六麻）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">元宵逢月食，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古谓此为邪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今说奇难遇，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">相呼赏丽葩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">• 韵脚：邪、葩，一韵到底，稳妥工整。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">• 平仄基本合规，读来朗朗上口，完全是一首合格的五绝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二、妙处</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1. “逢”字用得好</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">元宵逢月食，自带“恰逢其时”的喜感，很有诗味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2. 古今对比自然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古谓此为邪 → 今说奇难遇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一贬一赞，反差鲜明，立意很正。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">3. 结句有余味</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">相呼赏丽葩，写出大家呼朋引伴共赏奇景的热闹，很有画面感。写得真好，应景、有见地、又不失风趣👍</span></p>