<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二零二五年十二月上社课</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要求：以入声二沃作五言绝句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刊头题字 ：蒋孝余</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">收集简评 ：周国庆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美篇编辑 ：赵以顺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明英】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">采蘑菇</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">拾菌入林间，篮空心亦足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惟嫌惊鸟飞，搅了此闲局。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">开荒种地</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老来霜发束，汗滴滋畴绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日日摘鲜蔬，消闲又自足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;">评：闲适自在。即将退休的悠闲生活，好生让人羡慕。惟摘蔬稍觉俗，“日日堪采芹”，岂不更符合女史特征。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">砍柴二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">苍崖高复低，日下山溪渌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雉响在南坡，樵歌三两曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">樵夫不寂寞，山鸟声如曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">俯仰全凭性，浑忘荣与辱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：达观忘我。俯仰随心，山鸟曲犹樵者曲，也是个好心态。却有眼气我等尚须努力者之嫌。给个差评。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【文受刚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">致富农家迎亲即景</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要得良田沃，干中寻不足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为人苦读书，自有千钟粟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">轿中闻小曲，草上添新绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">炮仗去迎亲，椿萱心意足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有情成眷属，堂上燃花烛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翘首盼新人，朝门频踯躅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">创业求知欲，宵旰相继续。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">精明有志人，抱得颜如玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：农村新景。民俗民风，淳朴如是，锣鼓喧天，喜气洋洋，有情人终成眷属，双亲也是心里美滋滋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【钟华】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">远征军</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">少壮别双亲，舍身御外辱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九死究可悲，英雄落冤狱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">柬泰开战</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">巧语布天罗，高薪去难赎。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暹罗挥王师，誓拔此瘤毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：前诗慷慨悲壮，后诗痛斥侵略，义正辞严，可谓诤言。惟觉后诗立意似有瑕，若从领土争端、利益趋使角度立意，是否更好些。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【汪守先】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">作 诗</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出语存清婉，作诗厌浅俗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浩歌入雅情，古调翻新曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">快 然</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">放怀气象新，览物闲情笃。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">快然雅句成，春风哦朗旭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">高 步</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清襟带野色，高步吟乡曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨润物华妍，诗敲山水绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：其一袪俗，其二豁达，其三清丽，均见高情，三章可作一章读。汪哥真雅士也。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">【赵以顺】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">春行二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">其一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺语自南枝，潺潺溪水绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山樱孕素苞，只待春风触。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">其二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烟柳拂春堤，沿溪透浅绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">银鱼巡岸来，水暖谱新曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：冬已至，春未远，人若怀春意，节序何扰心。若兮笔下，春情喷薄，春味可掬，果是达人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【 谢 勇 】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">病中吟</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生事难余粟，病多常禁足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">窗风荐雅音，非是南薰曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">得闲</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">因病得清闲，诗心不拘束。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">彤毫避舜尧，字字念尘俗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：病体难禁诗心，清风时送弦音，笔下虽有沉郁，未见一俗字，赞。又，勇哥抱恙，不曾得知，万望安好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【周国庆】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">重看西游</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">年少爱猴王，除妖真有趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">而今看众妖，个个皆如玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">出 川</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">狼烟虐故园，壮士出巴蜀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">魂断路南柯，残阳垄上绿。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;">评：拙作。随手凑句。不堪卒读。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(128, 128, 128); font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">中夜闻曲</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜半惊幽曲，商音如碎玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">伏听寒雨生，谁把瑶琴续？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">冬 日</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霜枫染碧落，白草铺山峪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雁影逐寒烟，风声浑似玉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：前者萧瑟，后者空阔，寥落之景，度君之情。故曰，君莫听商音，触景易伤心。寒冬到了，春天还会远么？</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【梁正森】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">岁暮二首</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学后知不足，心绪总如束。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作诗恨词穷，时常拟俚曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">是谁在搅局，岁暮多感触。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">身陷牢笼中，何事不受束。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：人在囧途，几经蹉跎，君既洒脱，何妨长歌。浮世纭纭，不如意者十之八九焉。试以此二首窥之，作者似有矫情之嫌。一笑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【刘先伦】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">访圣云寺咏怀</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红尘来炼狱，谁点七星烛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生出玲珑心，却中此方毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">流年那可续，误食情花毒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">兰若半节香，能把青春赎?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(128, 128, 128);">评：中年说惜时，参禅能悟否？佛云，不可说。我道先伦多潇洒，先伦向佛诉真情。呵呵，原来是个痴人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p>