刊首语 <p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><span style="font-size:22px;">欣匀翠色描春景 试引清音和雅钟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “深圳市长青诗社诗钟分社（简称长青诗钟社）”在广大诗词楹联爱好者的期待中，承中国楹联学会诗钟分会专业指导，蒙深圳市长青诗社及长青诗学院鼎力支持，于乙巳新春沐雨新生。传统文化传承又添新枝，岭南诗坛幸得清响。诸联友闻之欣然，赓续前贤遗韵，切磋于斯；撷取时代新声，耕耘于圳。同好相携，愿以笔墨记录点滴，借网络联通四方，谨守初心，徐徐前行。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:right;"><span style="font-size:20px;">长青诗钟社 张能敏</span></p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:right;"><span style="font-size:20px;">2025年2月25日</span></p> 点评老师简介 <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;"> 周冰：</b><span style="font-size:20px;">网名冰洲企鹅，广东茂名人。中国楹联学会诗钟分会评委、广东楹联学会会员、广东岭南诗社茂名分社副社长兼秘书长。从事楹联研究与创作30余年，原创楹联作品3000余副，多次获得全国、省、市级的楹联竞赛奖项。在广东省《楹联》会刊等报刊杂志发表楹联学术论文5篇。2020年担任“崇文杯”全国楹联有奖大赛总评委。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">长青诗钟社每周楹联对句练笔第22期</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">二题出题老师：周冰</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">一、横云堪断岳</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:20px;">二、落叶随风蝴蝶舞</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">1. 董奕炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">闪电敢撕天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工稳，气度雄壮。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞花逐水锦鳞游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，比喻形象，锦鳞稍宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">2. 熊剑文 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">驾雾可遮天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗尚工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">疏枝漏雨鹧鸪啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，比喻关联不够明显。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">3. 蔡启新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">纵浪可滔天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，有气势。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮花逐水凤凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">注：李白《登金陵凤凰台》；也可理解为双关：凤凰花评：对仗工，比喻形象。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">4. 刘美艳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">逝水不流年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：语句不通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流霞染岭凤凰吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：叶/霞稍宽，对仗较工，比喻未关联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">5. 赖志雄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日自垂山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：岳/山词义相近。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(1, 1, 1); font-size:20px;">寒花映日鹧鸪吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，比喻未关联。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">6. 毛荣 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落雨欲平湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，有气势。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞舟逐浪海鸥欢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：叶/舟略宽，比喻未关联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">7. 张玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">漫雪欲弥天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞鸿列阵字符横</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗欠工，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">8. 吴本科</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞雁可书天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：云/雁稍宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美人逐浪锦鳞游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：美人对仗宽，比喻尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">9. 刘建利</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">长浪欲吞洲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，有气势。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流萤掠水玉鳞飞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：流萤、玉鳞对仗宽，比喻尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">10. 韩树国 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">立壁可穿天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工，有气势。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">佳人照水牡丹开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：佳人、牡丹对仗宽。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">11. 张发展 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">掣电欲燃峰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:18px;">评：对仗工</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮莲出水彩云漂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：比喻形象，彩云对仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">12. 方祥炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">曲水独长流</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：长流对仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">愁心伴雨凤凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：愁心不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">13. 文励洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">恶浪欲吞舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：舟字对仗略宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秋花带露织娘鸣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：比喻未关联，蝴蝶以连绵词对仗为上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">14. 老蜜蜂 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流水可浮舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：舟字略宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮云映日雪山堆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗不工，关联不及。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">15. 魏海 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">入海不停涛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">弹琴入耳凤凰鸣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：弹琴入耳对仗宽。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">16. 皮柏仁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横雲堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">白雨欲摧城</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：城字略宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶隨风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飛花伴日鹧鸪鳴</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，比喻未关联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">17. 姚小平</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">厚雪欲遮城</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：城字略宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">残花坠露杜鹃啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，比喻未关联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">18. 刘样明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日独浮江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，有意境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">斜阳映水鲤鱼翔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：斜阳略宽，比喻未关联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">19. 王凤华</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">皑雪压琼芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：压琼芳，对仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">20. 叶水招</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">垂瀑欲吞天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">行舟逐浪剑鱼飞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：舟字对仗略宽。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">21. 秦禾 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">激浪可惊天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">禽鸭入水燕鹰翔</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">22. 邹胜阶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">甘雨恰兴农</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗稍宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">繁花映水锦鳞描</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗尚可，描字欠斟酌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">23. 吴友元</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落日看流霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗欠工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞花逐水凤凰游</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，比喻形象。佳句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">24. 王庆春 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">卷浪欲衔崖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">芦花照水鹭鸶栖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：芦花稍宽，其他对仗工，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">25. 郑妙銮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">纵浪可吞川</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，有气势。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">流泉漱石杜鹃啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗尚可，比喻形象。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">26. 张能敏 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鸣瀑欲翻潭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，有气势。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">荒苔背日牡丹开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：牡丹对仗宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">27. 紫梦 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞瀑欲摩天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">轻舟逐水燕莺啼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：轻舟、燕莺对仗宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">28. 吕伯平 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">斜雨欲吞川</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，有意境。佳句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞花逐浪鹭鸶鸣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗工，比喻关联不紧。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">29. 王 晖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">飞鸟欲衔花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗过宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">凋花逐月夜萤飞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：夜萤欠工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">30. 邓未玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">乱草欲遮天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：草字稍宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮花映月玉蛾飞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：玉蛾对仗宽。<span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">31. 刘凤麟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">绝顶欲攀天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对仗尚可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">孤帆逐水鹧鸪飞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：帆字对仗稍宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">32. 吴建安 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">活水可推舟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：舟字略宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">绵羊结队白云飘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：比喻形象，对仗过宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">33. 李希海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">积雾欲长空</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：长字对仗不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">荻花照月鹭鸶栖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：荻花稍宽，比喻形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">34. 方后胜 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">横云堪断岳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(1, 1, 1);">出句好描天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">评：对句不工。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">落叶随风蝴蝶舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浮云拨雾的卢腾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:18px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">注：的卢刘备坐骑。评：对仗欠工，比喻未关联。</span></p> 长青诗钟社简介 <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">总顾问：孙 英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顾 问：陈丽荣 杨玲玲 刘万专 兰 葆 史桂娟 扈秀英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">客座教授：鲁晓川 于东光</span></p><p class="ql-block">指导教师：王善全 王安石 林奇敏 王纯富</p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">评联教师：许明 周 冰 盛跃章 熊剑文 李 楚 魏艳霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">名誉社长：刘新颖 刘红艳 许 明 盛月富 黄桂珍 文励洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">社 长：张能敏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副社长：王 晖 刘美艳 张玉忠 邓未玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">秘书长：王 晖（兼）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">副秘书长：董奕炎 刘样明 李希海 毛荣 齐春红 刘建利</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">长青诗社美篇编辑部主编：卢敬兵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诗钟分社美篇编辑部主编：文励洪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诗钟分社美篇编辑部副主编：邓未玲 张玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诗钟分社美篇编辑部编委：王晖 刘美艳 董奕炎 刘样明 李希海 毛荣 齐春红 刘建利</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美篇模版</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">图片摘自网络 感谢原作者</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期编辑：张玉忠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">本期审核：张能敏</span></p> 敬请期待下期精彩 <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">上期：</b><a href="https://www.meipian.cn/5hp3mgmh?first_share_to=timeline&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=50589725" target="_blank" style="font-size:18px; background-color:rgb(255, 255, 255);">长青诗钟社对句点评集锦-21</a></p>