<p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">飕飕的风</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">说来就来</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">赶着一朵朵乌云</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">像啃噬夜空的牦牛</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">是谁在辽阔的孤寂中</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">甩响时间的长鞭</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">抽疼了一个季节</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">让许多荒草惊慌地</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">向风鞠躬</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">是的 还会有一场雨</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">接踵而至</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">秋天的斑斓会与风一起</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">拱破山青收复绿水</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">杀一条路</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">奔向雪的故乡</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">谢谢芳芳依依老师雅赏点评</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">诗的节奏从风的骤然降临，到荒草的惊慌，再到雨的接踵而至，最后落脚于秋向雪的奔赴，层层递进间，既写尽了秋末自然的苍茫与动感，又暗含着季节更迭里的生命力，简短几句便勾勒出辽阔又细腻的意境 。</p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">谢谢依梅听雪老师雅赏点评</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">佳作欣赏。</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">美诗以“风”为骨，写得极有气势。开篇“牦牛”的比喻新奇有力，把风的野性具象化。最精彩的是“甩响时间的长鞭”一句，把无形的风提升到了驱动季节轮回的宏大维度，瞬间击中了人心。</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">结尾收于“雪的故乡”，意境开阔，完成了从狂放到宁静的诗意循环，老师笔力不凡。</p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">谢谢汾州文化老师雅赏点评</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">飕的秋风说来就来，赶着乌云像牦牛啃噬夜空。不知是谁在孤寂里甩响时间的长鞭，抽疼了季节，吓得荒草都向风鞠躬。之后还会下雨，秋天的斑斓会跟风一起冲破青绿、夺回绿水，开出一条路奔向有雪的地方。把秋风写得又野又有劲儿，完全不是常见的温柔路子，读着特别带感，太会写了，必须点赞。</p> <h3>《秋步》<a href="https://www.meipian.cn/2be1f7ew?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>网页链接</a></h3> <h3>《秋雨》<a href="https://www.meipian.cn/2genlgwn?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>网页链接</a></h3> <h3>《秋叶》<a href="https://www.meipian.cn/z98q9z5?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>网页链接</a></h3> <h3>《秋思》<a href="https://www.meipian.cn/1jg4yl7t?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>网页链接</a></h3> <h3>《秋夜》<a href="https://www.meipian.cn/2gibv85s?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>网页链接</a></h3> <p style="text-align: center;">――谢谢您的阅读――</p><p style="text-align: center;">🍃🍃🍃</p>