【播州雅韵】原创诗词第119期(用平水韵十四寒作七言律诗)

播州雅韵

<p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二零二五年七月下社课</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">要求:用平水韵十四寒作七言律诗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">收集简评 :梁正森</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刊头题字 :蒋孝余</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美篇编辑 :赵以顺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【汪守先】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">乙巳大暑前四日晓起观览清水河水库</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一点青螺牵思远,四围嘉气放眸宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日辉寥宇红浮影,霞映澄湖碧起澜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">野岸小寻添慨赏,晨风闲步作吟观。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">矶边渔钓乡歌动,大坝隆崇接翠峦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">乙巳大暑次日清水河水库漫吟</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">走石飞尘讵畏难,严霜染目意如磐。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高空步月身姿瘦,长夜照灯工地寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">岁老坝成千载利,阳骄水壅寸心丹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">频年栉雨劳人苦,汗洒流风蔚壮观。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:水利人治水,如鱼饮水,冷暖自知。功在当代,利在千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【刘先伦】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">悼葛老镇亚</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今夜无端共酒残,扶摇托月化雕鞍。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">海龙囤上揪心苦,杨柳街前老眼酸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">何用诗词书韵事,不如史实话悲欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本知此去蓬莱远,故把轻车换鹤鸾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:斯人已逝,永照丹青。黔北文物,全仗葛公得以闻名。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">乙巳季夏朔日新学酿果酒有寄</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今朝雨打湿雕栏,夕照幽林天地宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">垄亩千层清水远,荷香几缕暮山残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">摘来李柰两三捧,欲酿诗书一二坛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">若是君心真有意,何需王母遣青鸾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:酒熟年丰,诗成客何处。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【文受刚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">偶有失眠随想</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">羸躯不敌五更寒,钟鼓频摧晓梦残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深度成眠诚不易,险滩涉水实艰难。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">醒迟醒早凭天意,孰假孰真费药丸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人顺自然心态稳,何须学步到邯郸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:老去睡眠少,诗从枕上来。邯郸仍有梦,彩笔如花开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【唐嘉诚】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">过杜家陵园</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">颓然茔貌几多残,凭吊先生整衣冠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">此日乡间传轶事,当年城防得民安。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">精魂耿耿英灵振,往历昭昭气节端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">效仿北山归隐处,杜家林内影盘桓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">注:杜家陵园系遵义新舟小学创始人杜希陵先生家族陵园,内有先生及三位夫人墓,另有杜希陵先生次子杜叔机之妻赵氏夫人墓。先生晚年回乡新舟,效仿遵义开科进士李先立,自营生圹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:英灵仍在,气节昭昭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明英】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">纳凉共青湖畔</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一望湖心漾玉盘,轻风拂过水波宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝉鸣断续隐林树,蛙鼓疏狂喧草滩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点点飞萤头上绕,悠悠钓客岸旁看。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四周墅舍华灯炫,流彩盈眸暑气阑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:爽气西来,萤火蛙声,可以浮一大白。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【谢 勇】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">乙巳年润六月初四日晚归有怀</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人在底层诸事难,为争微利晚收摊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翟门失势鸟常落,食店转艰心欲寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">入目炎凉多感慨,劳形岁月只辛酸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">萧条市井营生淡,论世何曾水墨乾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">评:长太息以掩涕兮,哀民生之多艰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">贺龙社成立十周年兼寄李勇兄</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风雅十年同此欢,郢词齐至彩毫端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盈编珠玉供人赏,陈贺文章洒墨乾。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">结社须追莲土净,寻真但识井闾难。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">斯民应抱忧时意,诗逐阳春春已阑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:贺诗诚不易。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block">【梁正森】</p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">在路上</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">走村窜寨路何难,涉水登山意似盤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">望眼穿云思上下,酸风破雾悟高寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">林深树密蝉声懒,天淡阳骄鸟影残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">问道溯源无远近,此心安处此心宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">丹寨灾区行</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">秘境人间啼笑难,停停走走抑悲欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水洗家园余骨瘦,浪淘形影剩心寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枯藤老树拦腰断,翠竹青杉委地残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">满目疮痍添感慨,回车问路久盘桓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">伏天臆想</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月底催诗左右难,经营意象到毫端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">饮冰五内仍肝火,止沸三焦疑胃寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">屠暑莲荷青玉案,降温李柰水晶盘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清风何处携团扇,夜半流萤扑绣帘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">评:拙作,打胡乱说。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【祝西峰】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">村 夜</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烟光渐淡夕阳残,向晚纤云掩翠峦。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小阁霓灯生异彩,广场舞乐绕长栏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳当水岸千丝润,月在天边一点寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">不觉虫吟村夜半,关门倚枕怅盘桓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span>注 : 怅盘桓 :王粲《登楼赋》“夜参半而不寐兮,怅盘桓以反侧”,表达夜半难眠,思绪纷扰的状态。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:老祝睡不着,想老伴了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【钟 华】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">七七祭父</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七七流光悄自阑,空庭落照影犹寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">旧衫叠处尘初积,残墨凝时字未干。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风过疏帘疑步履,月移窗隙忆盘餐。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">纸钱烧尽灰还卷,知是慈亲不忍看。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:树欲静而风不止,子欲养而亲不在。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵以顺】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">隔屏见师门小聚,尤憾甲辰长沙行无书小跳未能成聚</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">望断关山客路难,隔屏艳羡只余酸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曾期共剪西窗烛,却负同倾绿蚁欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鬓上霜痕空自积,眉间憾意未容宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">何时再续当年约,莫使相思入梦阑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">评:西窗烛影,南浦水声。绿蚁新酒,相思何凭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">夏 夜</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">更深月上竹珊珊,石案茶香入夜残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">露坠青梧珠碎玉,星垂碧落斗垂栏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">轻摇蒲扇驱浮暑,静听晚风亦尽欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">偶有流萤穿竹过,恍随清梦拂冰纨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">评:虽云夏夜,境界清凉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【周国庆】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">应体伟兄邀乘陈兄义刚伉俪车东行永乐途中所见</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">数转迂回绕翠峦,驱风逐日路漫漫。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">旁车侧轴跐烟起,阿嫂惊心唤客看。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">少驻扶将凭指实,重行点检复随鞍。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笑谈径向仙乡去,倍觉眼前天地宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评: 驻足停车,风景无限。手挥五弦,地遥天宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【赵学鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">龙社十年庆于遵义遥贺</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白山黑水返犹难,极北回看梦未残。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">半世征程仍寂寞,十年归客亦蹒跚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗情常向梅边和,世事长从壁上观。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">似卧冰城听潮语,恍如那岁枕江干。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">评:梅边和诗,枕上听潮。征程不断,世事静观</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">车行息烽道中</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">车到山头力已殚,路来心上几萦盘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千峰立影窗间逝,卌载流光指上弹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">似入云霞明灭处,如迷诡幻有无端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">而今忽忆少年事,逐梦情怀未二般。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;">评:这该死的青春,眨眼就杀割。这悖时的命运,甩都甩不脱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(176, 79, 187); font-size:20px;"></span></p> <p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">【牟明鹏】</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px;">忆二十五年前隆冬登海龙囤</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遥望孤山血色残,荒城懒卧似龙蟠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">铜关锁月凭关易,虎隘封喉破隘难。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绝险如斯堪据守,雄强尚在忍留看。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千岩万转风云路,古道空余暮雪寒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);">评:海龙囤上风兼雨,断辟残碑不忍看。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px; color:rgb(176, 79, 187);"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p>