美篇237 2025年上半年联斋群友诗联集锦作品选评及群中作品选评

孙福奎

<p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(一)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一、田兴隆老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飘色非遗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">踩高跷炫起春潮,抖落奇葩,漫卷霞绸流量爆;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">趁上巳点开福袋,传承绝艺,轻摇羽扇菜单新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:流量爆,菜单新,新词语入联,精彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仲夏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝉韵称荷蕊,纳凉扇撼繁星,弹幕吞天瞋目望;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">萤光焊柳条,上线网评皓月,吃瓜说地会心甜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:遣词造句别致生动,有另一番韵味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">厅堂联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">随清风入座;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有明月萦怀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:言简意美,能呈现主人情趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二、霍东来老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇舞油都圆铁梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹊歌铁韵唱油春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:规则重字,精美意丰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺丁香诗社成立十五周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲赋诗联,丁香醉倒万千客;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东西南北,社帜飘红十五春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:夸张手法,妙笔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">元宵节</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">光幻声迷,万众攒街欢望月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">珠圆玉润,一锅沸水煮丰年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一锅沸水煮丰年,精彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三、杨金香老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨后观桐花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨洗千枝凝翠色;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风摇一树绽青霄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:雨洗千枝,风摇一树,描述生动形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">端午节</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">艾粽飘香香九域;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙舟竞渡渡千江。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:顶针手法精致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺滕州市诗词楹联学会第二届会员代表大会圆满召开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">两届扶轮手;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一群追梦人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:言简意赅,描述真切。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四、尹沛新老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老父</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">无言父爱如山重;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">有礼儿亲似海深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:正反对举和比喻手法出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风骚屈子魂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙舟竞渡,英名永载,纪念忧民忧国子;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">粽米飘香,艾草传情,讴歌不屈不挠魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:自对和重字,意韵悠长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红花送暮春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红颜送暮春,红花落瓣铺泥满;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绿浪漂残月,绿柳垂丝映水长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:表颜色的词,运用精美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五、傅贺楠老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为杨克炎著《历代书法咏论》撰联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞毫催落雁;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">跑马快扬蹄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:动感十足,构篇匠心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">醉酒铺笺谁布阵?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞浆展艺我冲锋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:设问,增添趣味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">凌云潇洒淘仙气;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上海风流撰玉亭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:淘仙气,撰玉亭,尽呈书法家风采。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.6.19《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(二)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六、杨兴满老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">孟春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">渐暖春光舒老柳;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">初来紫燕觅新枝。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:春光舒老柳,紫燕觅新枝,浓浓的诗意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">遵义会议九十周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">娄山焕彩,赤水放歌,长征故事天天讲;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">振奋精神,开拓境界,红色基因代代传。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:叠字“天天、代代”虽常用,但恰到好处,意韵丰厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芒种</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛙鼓声喧,杜宇声喧,合奏乡村交响曲;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">森林竞秀,禾苗竞秀,同描夏日壮观图。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:把词语重复用于自对中,别有韵味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七、朱青龙老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺新绛书协成立四十周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">妙笔随心,墨香飘满千秋卷;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">真情入纸,书意传承万古风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:千秋卷,万古风,古味满满,风雅耐品。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山摆翠屏云作画;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">泉弹玉曲鸟和声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:声色兼备,鲜活灵动。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为蔺府老母亲九十寿诞拟联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">堂前笑语,常调清福味;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">膝下欢颜,尽绽孝心花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:别致新颖,比喻出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">八、汤建农老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">旱船</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">不知渔父何方走;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">但见花鱼地上游。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:抓住渔父和花鱼,管中窥豹,可尽呈旱船景象。语句独特有味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">撷芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">李艳桃芳,群蜂酿蜜全飞苑;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风和日丽,游子寻春半出城。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:全和半,用绝了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烟花三月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">数声鸟语衔红去;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一曲田歌唱绿生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:鸟语衔红去,田歌唱绿生,意韵悠长,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九、笪德民老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">游嘉兴梦湖公园</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春波映梦湖,柳叶新新,少年笑在山尖上;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鸟语开心境,情怀切切,老眼耽于童趣中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一少一老,情趣皆出。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题赵尚志将军 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青春怀壮志,黄埔蕴宏韬,展雄才抗日麾军,赫赫威名传北满;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">荡寇最无情,出奇常制胜,为大众捐躯取义,煌煌正气慑东瀛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言大气,热烈咏赞,叠字出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小满感怀</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花若全开心便老;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人如小满梦方甜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:寓意深刻,给人启示。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十、高富老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏曹操</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雄才傲世,剑掣星芒,破乌桓,胜官渡,气吞沧海千重浪;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">壮志拿云,诗吟汉韵,临碣石,领建安,名震神州百代文。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:从政绩和诗才两方面评价曹操,得当。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏骆宾王</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七岁神童,绝句咏鹅,天赋诗才惊世早;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一生义士,雄文讨武,笔含浩气醒人迟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:惊世早,醒人迟,意味深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏杜甫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">少年吐凤才,困长安十载,战乱摧肠书三吏,陷贼中,谒严武,肝胆悬黎庶,壮笔开唐传史韵;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老病哀猿啸,卧湘水孤舟,霜风卷屋哭万方,怀稷契,友高岑,文章泣鬼神,骚坛立极冠人寰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:通过对杜甫一生的描述,展现诗人的伟大情怀,进行由衷咏赞,内涵丰厚,情感饱满。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.6.21《联斋》)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(三)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十一、张世旭老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春意</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">野壑兰花静;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">疏林草色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:兰花静,草色新,浓浓的诗意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">海岸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山路弯弯,层层叠叠,崎岖独绕盘天际;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">海燕翩翩,声声唧唧,远近频来接水间。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:多处叠字,生动地打造出画面。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">塔尔寺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清凉世界,香烟袅袅青山外;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">圣洁菩提,瑞气依依绿水边。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上下联的第二分句,生动形象,有力地呈现出清凉和圣洁氛围。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十二、潘进钊老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺新年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万里春潮,盏盏花灯盈瑞气;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千家炉火,盘盘水饺贺新年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:迎新年,吉祥热烈,充满浓厚的生活气息。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仲春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郁郁田园,柳绿花红摇蓓蕾;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">潇潇春雨,情柔意暖润田畴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:叠字精巧,韵味浓。两动词精美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雪莲花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">西藏扎根,披风傲雪娇容灿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天山绽蕊,卧岭攀岩玉骨坚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上下联的第二分句描述形象,呈出雪莲花的娇容玉骨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十三、彭克云老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞三春人惬意;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇盘五福岁舒心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上稿《对联》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:蛇年春联,吉祥如意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题植树节一</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">全民行动,栽苗栽绿栽希望;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">举国耕耘,种树种春种未来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上稿《运河联声》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:两结句的重字,意韵悠长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏桃花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">簇簇含芳,灿若晚霞红胜火;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夭夭逐梦,美如少女艳争春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">上稿《联都》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:比拟、比喻和重字,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十四、任正文老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题酒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">李白为吟,对影三人游蜀道;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">渊明作伴,衔杯一笑醉人间。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对影三人和衔杯一笑,趣味十足。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题山丹军马场</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">自得平川,清溪淹没将军影;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山前牧野,绿草摇来烈马声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:声色兼备,场景壮美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题海棠花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">叶底传香,赏层层夺艳争春景;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枝头见雪,惊朵朵飞琼比晓云。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘生动形象,画面绚丽迷人,海棠花风姿灼灼。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十五、李天龙老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题浴龙谷房车联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">房车聚萃醉春梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">营地集祥唱大风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:醉春梦,唱大风,诗味浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题喀左龙源湖联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古地呈祥,远山鸟舞龙腾苑;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">新湖献瑞,凌水鱼翔凤翥亭。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:画面生动形象,富动感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题宣纸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生宣慧写小康梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">熟纸精描宏伟图。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:普通的宣纸,能描绘出时代风貌,主题深刻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.6.24《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(四)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十六、丁武成老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉龙雪山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">清朗气通,泛波碧眼含春意;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赤诚心鉴,无悔白头护古城。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:运用生动的拟人手法,有景有情,将玉龙雪山跃然纸上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">何种</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">愚蠢贪婪,灭祖欺师,有奶是娘贼作父;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">恶毒狡诈,辜恩负义,当伥因虎友交狼。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一针见血,讽刺意味浓厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">前进</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">坚定不移,永远向前跟党走;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">奋发无怠,完全倾力为民谋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言朴实,倾心颂党,情真意切。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十七、江孔顺老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺《山花》出版发行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山藏珍宝,采玉撷珠,方塘半亩着新墨;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花吐芬芳,凌风傲雪,碧树千章浮暗香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:方塘半亩着新墨,碧树千章浮暗香,比喻生动形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">又是燕莺忙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烟雨蒙蒙,归巢且看衔泥燕;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">斜阳暖暖,隔岸忽闻梳柳莺。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:叠字味浓,莺燕动感精美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题周果同学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小小少年,习字习琴,碑帖煌煌多涉猎;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莘莘学子,好棋好动,文峰赫赫屡登临。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:叠字、重字极精致,联作意韵丰厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十八、张汀浩老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺梅州市学艺中学诗社成立二十周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">二十春秋,学堂溢彩;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万千平仄,艺苑流芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:二十春秋,万千平仄,用数量词概括展示诗社历程,好手法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大唐三门峡发电有限公司春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">处处星辰,光耀三门明似昼;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">家家灯火,辉腾万户暖如春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:比喻精彩,诗味浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一山拔地千寻险;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万木擎天百鸟呜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言精练,画面恢宏,声形壮美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十九、杨祖新老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题松滋登云楼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">远望老城城未老,依旧云层厚重;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">禅观新市市尤新,显然景致繁华。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:顶针和重字精彩,依旧、显然两词味浓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">岁久根坚,撑起青山一片绿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">年深干壮,招来白鹤几双闲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上联雄浑,下联婉约,互相衬托,意境至美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">松滋古八景江亭晚钓</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江亭静倚,晚照余晖添雅趣;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">碧水闲垂,钓丝轻舞伴清风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘画面鲜活,钓趣信手拈来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿、郁犁老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">励志联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惜春莫若拥春种;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">行路何如引路来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:人生领悟,寓意深刻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">即兴联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夕夕多哉,起日当知落日;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山山出也,晚霞堪比朝霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以日出日落和朝霞晚霞作比,阐述人生哲理,给人极有益启示。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">图书馆联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">临之生绮梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">入座品书香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:言简意赅,着笔独特,充满雅意,用意象展示图书馆内涵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.6.28《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(五)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿一、扈金海老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">年味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">长街璀璨,古巷斑斓,年味浓浓,珠光十里春花放;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉树凝辉,华灯耀彩,和风暖暖,秀色一城紫气开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:用众多生动意象,呈出不寻常年味,迷人至极。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">长江</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">涛涛巨浪,越三峡,妆五岳,哺育中华大地流东海;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">滚滚长江,穿九省,纳千川,润泽沃野桑田裕子民。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:大笔描绘,汹涌澎湃,将长江的壮美气势呈于面前,读之震撼人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">览高原水泊,青海盐湖,欣日月神山,金银草甸,烟波浩渺八千里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烟波浩渺八千里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">看斑雁啼歌,天鹅起舞,赏文成宝镜,王母瑶池,风雨苍茫百万年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:领字精美,带出壮丽画面。两结句出彩,诗味扑鼻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿二、卫万荣老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赞杨振声老师高考联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联墨开新境;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">爱心励后昆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:既赞杨师高考联之艺术,又赞其爱心,意韵丰厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联题秦文亮、杨旭影配诗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">摄影香,诗词美,珠联璧合双星耀;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">图风秀,韵律奇,艺汇情连一脉承。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:句式流畅,咏赞之情溢于笔瑞。两结句精致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联贺哈尔滨市诗词楹联家协会第九届端午诗会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蒲剑斩云开楚调;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗舟犁浪续骚魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言精练,比喻生动,意象新颖形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿三、黄保权老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题对联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大美两行字;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">真情一片心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对对联的感悟真切,表达了联人共同心声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蜧舞西山云水阔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙腾北渚浪花浮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:画面生动形象,好春联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题孟春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青山石径屯春意;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白屋花溪听鸟声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:孟春水彩画,声色兼备。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿四、杨旭老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赠李金梅老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金玉心中彩,万丈才情,挥笔无边皆丽句;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梅兰襟内香,一身优雅,流年不尽是芳华。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言风雅,满满赞意,嵌名自然。万丈才情,一身优雅,韵味悠悠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题海石篆刻</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刀起飞龙处;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">铭成落凤时。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:动感之美,美不胜收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题画室</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">手握生花笔,云千重,水千重,有声有色素笺里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胸藏磨杵心,雨几载,风几载,无暑无寒斗室中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:排比句式,重字手法,极出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿五、张凤梅老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺运河联声建群六周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六载挥毫,四卷描红群友梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千期吟赋,联声唱醉运河人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描红群友梦,唱醉运河人,好句,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春分</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风软软,雨丝丝,清露甘霖滋碧野;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕翩翩,莺恰恰,红桃粉杏醉青眸。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:流畅的句式,呈出不寻常的春分画面。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水仙花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郁郁冰清尘外客;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亭亭玉立水中仙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:尘外客,水中仙,用于水仙花再恰当不过了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.6.29《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(六)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿六、刘孝明老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">福禧盈门</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春风在室千家暖,</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">福字临门一岁红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:春风送千家暖,福字映一岁红,句美意深,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惠风和畅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一阵和风人惬意,</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">满瞳春色鸟开怀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:人鸟互动,诗意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辽阳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千载辽城矗白塔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三江文士仰瑶峰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:辽阳白塔壮美,而瑶峰(“关东才子”王尔烈,号瑶峰)才华横溢,信受尊敬。抓住辽阳两个侧面描述,好笔法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿七、石钧老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红包</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">共享团圆,红皴日色凝希望;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">平分幸福,包鼓春风送吉祥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:把红包诠释得如此深透,好句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨润草心坼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小雨如酥,草心澹荡诗心爽;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">和风若酒,柳眼朦胧醉眼开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:精致的拟人手法,让画面生动至极。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">早春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雪掀麦被,雨点梅腮,水暖鱼游嬉鸭绿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雾吻桃唇,日迷柳眼,风柔雁返咏鹅黄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以多个意象展示,早春之美,确有独特意味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿八、李俊科老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春深梧青</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枝白蕊黄寒已退;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花红草绿暖犹来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:枝白蕊黄寒已退,花红草绿暖犹来,将春之景象呈于面前。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨练</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜深露滴鸟啼少;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">早起香飘人聚多。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:自然景色衬托晨练人,意趣盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山城晨语</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寺山先醉送残月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">析水自宽催晓风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:山水如此生动,其乃是山城的形象大使。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廿九、赵春恩老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仲春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绿色生香,新芽嫩叶逢春雨;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">溪声出韵,细浪清流润大田。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:善于构造画面,笔法细腻形象,可闻绿色之香,溪声之韵,春意盎然,赏心悦目。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仲夏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绿滿山丘,林香叶碧,夏雨青泉如泛玉;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翠深岸谷,草色花红,炎阳紫雾似飞金。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:比喻精美,色彩斑斓,富动感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">付贵宁先生书法展</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔下多为秦汉帖;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">锋端尚有晋唐风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:概括评述,言简意丰,赞誉有加。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅、杜泰年老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">“南国金嗓杯”春联优秀奖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春回南国开金嗓;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">福趁东风满绿城。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:春开金嗓,福满绿城,迎春接福,美好寓意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杨柳岸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">看春归处,新杨泛绿,弱柳摇黄,十里长堤酬赋客;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">待风过时,夹岸缤纷,轻舟荡漾,一湖淑景醉游人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:自对灵动,画面优美,两结句出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">正摘二春茶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">谷雨将临,凭素手穿梭,翠叶新摘犹带露;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">茶烟初沸,正青芽舒卷,玉瓯慢煮看流云。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:摘二春茶,诗情画意,将茶之香气与人之心境融为一体。好手法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.1《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(七)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅一、彭显来老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题彭克云老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">克绍师魂滋沃土;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云游墨海润心田。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:敬赠好友,出自肺腑之言,情深意重。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题中条山</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">中条山翠,千峰叠韵迎霞起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古塞云悠,万壑飞歌载梦来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:两结句意象极美,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题老年大学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白首同窗,墨染诗心寻雅趣;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黄门共砚,琴鸣鹤骨享韶光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:黄簧同音,借指学校。墨染诗心,琴鸣鹤骨,有意味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅二、吴岱宝老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">女娲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">炼石补天功九夏;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">抟泥造世福千秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:高度概括,展示丰富内涵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">石</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">挺一身硬骨,上可补天,下能础地;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">捧千古文心,远传籀篆,近绘丹青。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:石如人也,咏石,弘一种精神。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">彩礼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">本为青鸟传祥瑞;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">却系重金变祸殃。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言生动,剖析深刻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅三、段允生老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">学校春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一颗心爱千家子;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五育苑开四季花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:生动形象,寓意丰厚,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老年食堂春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为老者就餐酿美味;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">替亲人尽孝报春晖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言朴实,内容真切实在。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">西门联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">西天老母送福至;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东道主人迎客欢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:巧妙运用西、东两词,画面别致,意韵悠长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅四、肖德飞老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题风骚屈子魂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">情寄汨罗,千舟竞渡,尚怀一卷离骚韵,一世长存,一片精忠,一代诗才沉水里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">粽香端午,万户行吟,犹念九州屈子魂,九歌永唱,九回直谏,九章绝笔问天中。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:重复数词,新颖别致,增添无限韵味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题北湖公园</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖荷摇扇,波月连珠,闲坐幽亭猜鸟语;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">信步游园,聚朋携侣,漫行曲径辨花香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:妙用诸多动词,诗意盎然。尤其是猜鸟语、辨花香,匠心独运。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乙巳年春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绿水青山春染绿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红心赤胆梦飞红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:绿、红,绚丽夺目,寓意形象深刻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅五、付贵宁老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025年,农历乙巳新春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙吟大海;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇舞春天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言精练,意象鲜明,寓意丰满。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题甲辰龙年春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙行一雨青山耸;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇舞三春绿水深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">横批:紫气东来</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:龙行雨,蛇舞春,画面生动形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题甲辰龙年春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">俭朴家,事事生花,流金日月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">勤劳者,行行出彩,纳福春秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">横批:向阳门第</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言朴实,生活气息浓郁,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251); font-size:22px;">(2025.7.5《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">《大漠行吟》:海石画里诗正浓作品选评</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南杨旭拙诗:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题海石画作《大漠行吟》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水墨毫皴卷,茫茫大漠深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">牦牛云里现,落日暮沾襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:杨旭老师谦虚地称自己的诗为“拙诗”,其实此诗质量很高,真实而又形象地展示出付贵宁老师《大漠行吟》画作的丰富场景和深刻内涵。如:茫茫大漠深的空旷,牦牛云里现的气势,落日暮沾襟的感受……让人走进画中,领悟到青藏高原中心地带戈壁草滩的不寻常魅力。画美诗美,珠联璧合。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江傅贺楠老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭主席《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨泼乾坤阔,苍茫大漠深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风嘶牛势猛,暮色卷衣襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此步韵诗,巧妙地拓展了杨旭原诗意境。作者善于匠心遣词,如形容词“阔、猛”,动词“泼、嘶、卷”,名词“乾坤、牛势、暮色”等,如珠玉闪闪发光,气象万千,增添了无限韵味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南杨正温老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭会长《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">纵墨吞星月,苍茫暮色深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">洪荒吟海石,焉可丈胸襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此诗气势恢宏,展示贵宁老师画作的壮美。纵墨吞星月,墨之势让人惊叹!洪荒吟海石,既是海石(贵宁)吟咏洪荒,也把海石(一种象征物)置于大漠中,令人遐想翩翩。焉可丈胸襟,反问句把诗人、画家的胸怀和气度发挥到极致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江郁犁老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭主席《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云卷狂沙起,天光已不深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">牦牛何所忆,大漠入胸襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此步韵诗独辟蹊径,用写实手法,生动形象地呈现贵宁画作之美。低垂的云层,卷起的狂沙,暗暗的天光,思忆的牦牛……众多意象,让大漠与人的胸襟融为一体,相辅相成,给读者想象空间。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南张项学老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步杨旭主席韵《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔舞天翻墨,云浓野旷深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莫言风骤起,正得谿胸襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此步韵诗语言诙谐,体现独自诗风。前两句虽写大漠的苍茫苍凉,但后两句一转,莫言风骤起,正得谿胸襟,茫茫大漠可深邃人的胸襟。轻松的语句,呈现出人对大漠的另一番情趣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陕西吴岱宝老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭主席诗《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大漠行吟处,云翻墨色深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">耗牛形影吊,泣泪湿衣襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:茫茫大漠,空寂压抑,气候变化异常,在这样的环境氛围中,难免会有孤独感。这种情绪于诗中描述得淋漓尽致。耗牛形影吊,泣泪湿衣襟,借耗牛反映人的情感,读之唏嘘不已。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辽宁董文学老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">集句步韵杨旭会长题海石画作《大漠行吟》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">目极家山远,(唐.吴融)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">尘劳日向深。(唐.沈传师)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">穹苍真漠漠,(唐.元稹)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">何物累胸襟。(明.赵昱)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:集古诗句成诗,且步韵,没有深厚的笔力和基础很难达到。此诗集古诗句自然顺畅,意境切实,形象逼真,将大漠描绘得栩栩如生。读之,带你走进画作中,如临其境,仔细品味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南李青旺老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭老师《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大漠沙如雪,何方草木深?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">几多追梦客,壮志满双襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:诗作以新的角度构篇,即让追梦客进入大漠,得以深切领悟,从而壮志满双襟。这些追梦客,包括画作者、诗作者以及广大读者。用这种方式,将大漠的风貌韵致独特地展现出来,不落俗套,推陈出新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江徐文德老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭会长题海石画作《大漠行吟》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天阔烟云笼,荒茫草野深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高原舟亦立,何惜汗蒸襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注:高原之舟牦牛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:诗作别具一格,立起高原之舟的形象,借助牦牛,描述大漠风情风韵。这样的写法容易打动读者,更富感染力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西卫万荣老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亦题海石画作《大漠行吟》——步杨旭兄雅韵以和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨浪随尘卷,沙涛入画深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔挥云影破,夕照满诗襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此诗把“墨、画、笔、诗”这些呈现诗作、画作的词,融入呈现大漠自然景物的词“尘、沙、云、夕照”中,互衬互补,结合得体,描绘细腻空灵,美轮美奂。此写法独出心裁,收到不一般效果,好笔法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">广西黄已力老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步韵杨旭先生《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题画赋诗吟,诚然寓意深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">连珠之妙语,将裔见胸襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注:杨家将后裔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:此诗对杨旭老师题画赋诗给予高度评价。杨旭老师第一个用题诗形式把贵宁老师的画作《大漠行吟》推荐给广大读者,有助于人们对这幅深沉画作的理解,此乃功不可没。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海付贵宁老师:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">步杨旭主席诗《题海石画作“大漠行吟”》原玉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浩荡层云耸,行吟感独深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">唯君劳望眼,大漠未披襟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:这是画作者贵宁老师的步韵之作,字里行间流露出作画行吟感受,是出自肺腑的真情实感。亦显示了画作者的谦虚和真诚,一位画家的高尚品德。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.9《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(八)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅六、杨明星老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题王维</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">半仕半闲名士范;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亦诗亦画雅情公。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:抓住王维特点描述,语精意丰。重字富意味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题荷花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">翠叶莹莹,捧玉珠娇容半掩;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">粉花怯怯,含香蕊雅意轻舒。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">(对联天地25.6.28)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘生动形象,叶花互衬,画面多彩。娇容半掩,雅意轻舒,诗味浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题永乐宫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">永乐宫中,尊道教祖庭,仙风袅袅;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">纯阳殿内,赏壁画瑰宝,圣像煌煌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:将永乐宫的氛围和内涵呈于面前。道教仙气,壁画圣像,令人敬畏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅七、毛利民老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题展望自己的2025年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">欢度夕阳,固本强基,健体晨行三十里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">弘扬国粹,钩深致远,修心夜诵一篇文。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:健体晨行三十里,修心夜诵一篇文,实实在在,妙哉!敬佩!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题神州乙巳春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">劲舞小龙盘大福;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">奋飞中国奏强音。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:有气势,鼓舞人心,好春联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题乙巳大年初二</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">走娘家,迎婿日;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">椿萱拜,姊妹聊。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:真切描述,浓浓的生活气息。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅八、吴会学老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三门峡建庄律师事务所</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">持公平剑;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">扬正义旗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一语千金,语精意深,展现内涵丰厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">植树节</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">植月栽春勤造就;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青山绿海汗浇成。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:自对纯熟,画面空灵生动。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙抬头</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春雷乍响,穿帘雨幕腾龙势;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕语初鸣,剪柳刀锋泛玉光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:有气势,富韵味。两结句出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卅九、周钧老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">芒种</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刈麦插秧,听马达隆隆,追星赶月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夯桩筑坝,看银锄闪闪,唤子呼妻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以生动之笔描绘出芒种时农民劳作场景,具体真切,读之如临其境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">走进春天(佳作联)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红桃点点,细雨霏霏,霜翁垂钓鱼吞饵;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">绿柳丝丝,黄莺恰恰,白鹭横飞鸭戏波。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘生动形象,叠字有味,动词耀彩,画面鲜活,声色兼备。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">扁担女孩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盛世俊才,脚步从容,黉园三载鲲鹏展;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寒门学子,目光坚定,担杖双肩日月扛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:抓住女孩的脚步和目光,着笔不凡,描述有力,将其理想、意志、情怀尽呈笔端,富感染力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌、石光明老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乙巳春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">小龙贺岁春风度;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大有怡年佳气开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:春风度,佳气开,乙巳春联,满满的喜乐和瑞祥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">开春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">天增暖调,细雨多情滋草树。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">地唤春声,清风着意润山川。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:天增暖调,地唤春声,别致新颖,诗意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺兴平市楹联艺术家协会成立40周年暨第七次会员代表大会贺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四十年古韵欣传,楹联彰大雅;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七代会雄风再振,文事展高怀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言雅致,概括描述,给予极高评价,对大会热烈祝贺,情真意切。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251); font-size:22px;">(2025.7.8《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(九)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌一、邵增煌老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">农资商店春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">服务三农,田园一片绿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">融合四季,村镇万家春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:田园一片绿,村镇万家春,生动形象,韵味浓浓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题运城盐湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">盐运带来国运;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">银湖胜过西湖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:高屋建瓴,语精意美,重字精致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺于奇老师八十二寿诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白发践初心,德馨品雅享耋寿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宏篇圆夙梦,联妙墨香树楷模。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:贺意真切热烈,其人其寿其品其才跃然纸上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌二、王新栋老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题荞面饸饹</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">粗粮荞面益康健;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">美味饸饹香齿唇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言朴实无华,真切实在,评价服人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题馓子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">丝丝相伴丝丝顺;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">馓馓成花馓馓香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:概括描述,重复叠词韵味浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">挽万荣作家解放老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">惊闻噩耗,总疑解老成仙去?</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">长忆英魂,忽见天公落雪来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:深情悼念,情真意切,生动意象增添无限哀思。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌三、赵式立老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">望奎文化广场</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">信步读诗吟韵场;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">悠心赏景健身园。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:充满文化内涵,又吟韵又健身,真乃好去处。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千鹤岛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">白鹭上青天,鸥翔鹤舞一汀水;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">野鸭藏绿苇,泽美荷香满岛诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:生动描绘,千鹤岛景致美不胜收,让人向往。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">肇东记忆历史展馆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辈辈累繁荣,旧旧斑斑钢轨梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">年年积岁月,辛辛苦苦肇东人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:用叠字笔法,不寻常句式,细腻描述,深刻挖掘,呈出展馆的蕴含的历史意义。出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌四、刘志英老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">厅堂联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">心持雅量涵千壑;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">室纳清风润四时。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:高雅脱俗,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">道德</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">善良,从心开始;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">仁厚,由爱生成。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:人生哲理,寓意深刻,给人启迪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赤兔马</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">烈焰腾云,踏破关河惊敌胆;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">丹心贯日,驮持义将建殊功。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:将赤兔马描绘得惟妙惟肖,令人敬畏。出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"><span class="ql-cursor"></span></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌五、罗毅老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暮夏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛙鼓渐高,垄上生萤翼;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">荷花独盛,塘边待藕香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以意象展示,画面生动,充满诗意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湄潭翠芽</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人上春山,篓篓篼篼摘翠垄;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">炉开湄水,壶壶盏盏沏新香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上联写摘翠芽,下联写沏新香,描绘细腻形象。叠字意韵浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乌阳麻桃花岛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">拥岛不足奇,青山碧水已成景;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">种花才有美,靓朵繁枝自引人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上联衬托,突出下联桃花,展呈桃花岛内涵。好笔法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.11《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(十)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌六、和西典老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题河北沧海印社40周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高手同心,文脉传承,四旬成果累;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神刀寄韵,印风激荡,九域盛名扬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言雅致,高度评价,充满情意。高手同心,神刀寄韵,意味深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题诗画人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">以诗交友不轻德;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">作画抒情皆出心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:道出作诗作画真谛,给人深刻启示。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题牛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">人人从业,要学黄牛甘负重;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日日效之,只餐青草不求奢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对牛的评价十分中肯,牛的精神人当效之,至理名言。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌七、洪善宽老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">南通钟楼春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">钟报新春,紧随时代争分秒;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">楼瞻远景,喜看海江竞未来。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:呈现出钟楼的时代新意,挖掘深刻。嵌名自然顺畅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">村委会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">振翅驭春风,三农发展领头雁;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贴心传大爱,百姓赞扬孺子牛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:既是领头雁,又是孺子牛,对村委会评价实在。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乌镇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水巷乌篷摇月影;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">石桥绿柳映波光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔生动,抓住乌镇特色,描绘得如诗如画。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌八、杨威老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题凤翔木版年画</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">麒麟献瑞,传播文明《春色满》;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙凤呈祥,秉承智慧《梦魂香》。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:麒麟、龙凤,吉祥如意,呈现出木刻年画贴紧民间百姓、接地气特色。概括描述,大处着笔。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题凤翔木版年画</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金刀锐眼,绣凤描龙《遍地锦》;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">细刻精雕,飞花点翠《满庭芳》。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:嵌入词牌,展示其美,把凤翔木刻年画描绘得惟妙惟肖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题观鱼亭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万顷湖波,湖边垂钓,拖蓝碧水观鱼跃;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三层亭阁,亭上抚琴,叠翠青山听鸟鸣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一亭雅意,令人神往。鱼跃鸟呜,声色迷人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">卌九、马文旭老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">凤台留云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">彩凤曾栖,展翅高鸣翔福地;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">飞虹肯寄,乘风去后伴云霄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:彩凤、飞虹入画,美到极致。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">欣赏晁景塘先生印作有感</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">痕深夺目;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">石破惊魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一言千金,高度概括,生动耐读。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼叠翠层阴里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝶闹千红万紫丛。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:啼、闹两词灵动。叠翠层阴里、千红万紫中,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十、杨玉才老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">词牌联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">羞花《点绛唇》,粉丝来会《安公子》;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">闭月《钗头凤》,闺蜜相约《虞美人》。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:洞牌联,构造出精致意象,画面美不胜收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">修身楹联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">读书修己;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">观景怡神。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">筒评:读书观景,修己怡神,修身之道,堪为箴言。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏竹</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">时时拔节,敢刺乌云,愿生禹甸;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">处处溢香,联盟三友,入列四君。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:叠字精美,自对生动,将竹的形象和品格呈于笔端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251); font-size:22px;">(2025.7.14《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(十一)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十一、周万全老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇年新年联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一元伊始东风阔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万象更新春日高。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:东风阔,春日高,引用古诗句,精美,让蛇年春联诗意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亲戚武汉等地搞装修</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙岁宏猷通楚域;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇年财运上庭阶。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:美好祝福,财运亨通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为兴平市楹联协会成立四十年召开七次会员代表大会撰联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七次检军容,联唱兴平盛世,挥毫述志万千副;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一时皆宿将,情怀协会初衷,起凤腾蛟四十年。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:高度评价,内涵丰厚,深切祝贺。好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十二、杨正温老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨露风云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">‍毫沾雨露千秋画;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪云风四季春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:浓烈的诗情画意,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题青海云山堂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山堂聚德,石上飞刀,刀魂抟气度;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">象管凝贤,诗行缀玉,玉韵擘风标。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:好大的气势,雄浑壮美,云山堂魅力无限。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏河南豫剧名家李金枝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金灿荣盛世,一路梆声一路诗,诗妍嵌福;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">枝舒闹元宵,一樽豫韵一樽酒,酒馥凝祥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:运用嵌名、重字、顶针等多种修辞手法,把名家形象塑造得栩栩如生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十三、杨兴芹老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">致敬杨旭老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">杨氏高贤挥妙笔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联斋西峡领新潮。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:从杨旭老师挥妙笔和领新潮两方面着笔,呈现其不凡才华和巨大贡献,表达由衷敬意。好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺运河联声群组建六周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">醉梦春风妙笔挥,百花炫彩,四海飞歌,运河鼓浪千帆竞;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">迷人福地精英聚,群庆六年,志追一品,古郡增光万物荣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语美意深,热烈祝贺,抒发豪情,表达广大群友心声。诸多数量词特美,熠熠生辉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题大运河经过的城市——扬州</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九州福地扬春梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三月烟花载客船。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:匠心化用古诗句,一句三月烟花载客船,呈出扬州特色。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十四、殷红其老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025蛇年春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙騰瑞气春光映;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蛇舞和风远梦开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:春光映,远梦开,词语新颖别致,意味深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">初冬景象</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">松声雪色,柔情画卷随风阔;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">竹影霜华,逸兴诗篇遍地开。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:景美意深,情景交融,描绘生动形象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">暮春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青山复忆,长怀雁到花迎客;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">碧水悠然,笑谢春归鸟傍人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:精美的拟人手法,画面出彩,诗意浓郁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十五、盛维年老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">统帅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">凭伟人指点,万里江山同色秀;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">随智者航行,九天日月共光华。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:深情之笔,敬仰之心,耐品之联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">曲•酒</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">念念不忘,戏听三岔口;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">沾沾自喜,酒饮二锅头。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:戏听三岔口,酒饮二锅头,美美的生活情趣,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">运河傍珠湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月落晚风柔,聊把运河当对枕;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日升湖面阔,暂和唐塔且同船。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:两结句趣味横生,耐品耐读。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.16《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(十二)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十六、王国祥老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为省营商局驻村赠联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">驻村耕沃土;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">播惠暖民心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以形象的语言,呈现驻村局为民造福之大作为。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺哈尔滨丁香诗社成立十五周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑土植根,白雪铸魂,一簇花英香万里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冰城筑梦,松江润笔,两行联语韵千重。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔亲切,笔法不凡,意象中润深情厚意,热烈祝贺!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">佳木斯市“金蛇献瑞,华章喝彩”征联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">龙抬头,福招手,鱼肥酒熟街津口;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春打卡,客盈门,燕舞莺歌赫哲人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语畅意丰,生动表达春临街津口,福盈赫哲人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十七、彭建明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">灵蛇劲舞发财路;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">骏马奔腾致富门。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:灵蛇骏马出动,给发财致富添新意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题百二小学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">庠府独骚,重教强师先铸魂,躬耕百廿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青衿正雅,尚学壮志尽随处,砥砺八方。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:全面描述,语美意深,让人由衷敬仰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题镇二小学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">怀志笃行,星驰正雅千篇序;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">乘时奋进,鲤跃端淑万里天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:星驰千篇序,鲤跃万里天,意味深长,精彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十八、陶汉清老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">纪念抗战胜利80周年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十四功高,铁骨驱倭垂竹帛;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">八旬绩著,丰碑立世慰忠魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:咏颂抗战,立丰碑,慰忠魂,扬中华志气,鼓舞人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吕四渔港</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千舸云集,补网修船,志在苍生寻富路;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">百业俱兴,织帆整棹,勇行碧海拓新天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:上下联前两分句描述细腻形象,两结句出彩,港口的意义不言而喻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">图书馆</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书海徜徉,诗句萦怀通慧路;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨香陶醉,文章过眼有高才。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:借写图书馆,呈现出知识的重要性,对人颇有启发和勉励作用。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五十九、吴桂林老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">高考生加油</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书窗映雪,灯火五更,不负十年追梦志;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梦笔生花,云帆六月,试看万里奋鹏心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:为高考生加油鼓劲,语重心长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">捡趣成联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">能屈,能伸,能正,能邪,是非之后终归岁月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">可无,可有,可留,可去,取舍之间便是人生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:谐趣之中道出人生哲理,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题北濠桂花岛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">院庭宽阔,看画栋雕梁,一派诗情画意;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花草参差,闻春兰秋桂,四时燕语莺歌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:一幅生动画面,声色兼备,描景抒情,着笔不凡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"></span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十、董诗婉老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">云南蚌渺湖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑山璀璨明珠映;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖水晶莹玉带缠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:明珠、玉带互衬,呈现出黑山湖水无限魅力,宛若一幅迷人的风景画,美不胜收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鄂温克族</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">瑞鹿铃摇,桦皮细刻图腾梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">神幡鼓震,篝火长燃朔鲁情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描述卾温克,特色鲜明,展示出其生活场景,生动逼真。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风雪夜归人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一阵寒风孤影抖;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">两行雪印冷光遥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘风雪夜归人,栩栩如生。寒风、孤影、雪印、冷光……遣词精准。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.20《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(十三)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十一、杨振生老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏韶山毛主席铜像(百言联)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一书在手,忆当年少小出乡关,橘子洲头,黄洋界上,刺破苍穹锷未残,扫倭持久论,咏雪沁园春,延安窑,总统府,地覆天翻吟马背;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万道披肩,迎灿烂朝霞还故国,韶峰照旧,茅屋依然,湘音满口从无改,赤县复昂胸,白宫亦俯首,超汉武,藐秦皇,铄今震古换人间。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:百言长联,大手笔,大气魄,深情咏颂伟人,满满的正能量,鼓舞人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">缅怀赵云峰先生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">超万仞云,立万仞峰,表里山河留雅韵;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吟千秋事,歌千秋业,光风日月仰宗师。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:缅怀联感人,悼念赵云峰先生,宗师之风,宗师之韵,宗师之业,宗师之品,永留人间。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赠梁石(拉成)兄</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">真羡君,天拉成,地拉成,天地拉成三晋汉,说来一介书生,楞将这豆腐块块,诗句行行,填满山河表里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">填满山河表里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">犹笑我,武未就,文未就,武文未就九州心,眼看八旬耄耋,也只能断茎根根,狂僧草草,漫吟华夏春秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:杨振生先生的联作,从语言风格、篇章句式、修辞手法诸多方面,让我们大开眼界。融新奇、精美、诙谐、厚重于一炉,提供了学习典范。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十二、陈在强老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">半集句联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四壁诗书怡倦眼,醒来,仍醉剑书仍醉砚;(当代•陈在强)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一簑烟雨任平生,归去,也无风雨也无晴。(宋代•苏子瞻)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:半集句联,妙笔生花,与古诗句相辅相成,韵谐意合。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺广西楹联学会成立三十周年联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">广寒追梦三生幸;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">西子捧心十步芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:嵌字精巧。言简意赅,既祝贺学会成立三十周年,又表达联人追梦襟怀。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺青海省楹联学会成立八周年暨三届换届联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">历八年宠辱不惊,携八斗英姿悄绽;每相牵那青海湖边,渤海潮头,自有暗香盈袖书香溢;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">迎三届沧桑饱蘸,驭三星个性雄张;谁敢傲这诗坛重镇,联坛劲旅,独能豪气凌霄剑气横。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔大气雄浑,回顾历史彰显功勋,描述未来呈现美景,贺意热烈,寄情真切。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十三、何强老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为陇西郡窑柴烧创作营撰联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">老君真火烧,丹成九转通禅意;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">古郡柴窑旺,器铸千般显匠心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:笔法别致,引入老君炼丹通禅意作比,此窑的“器铸千般显匠心”意味不同寻常。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东乡布塄沟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">布谷催春,一犁膏雨塄沟翠;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">东乡织梦,万户新楼福字红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:妙笔勾画,景色迷人,幸福满满,热情赞美,意境深邃耐品。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">父亲节得联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">持家始解家,肩挑日月油盐重;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">为父方知父,背负山河冷暖深。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言真切,情深意重,重字和动词意味深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十四、张克刚老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题广西 “金嗓杯”联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">八桂迎春,金嗓唱红千里韵;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九州载誉,口碑赢得万民心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:唱红千里韵,赢得万民心,佳句意味深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题湖北中部崛起</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三镇腾飞,黄鹤春风铺画卷;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千城崛起,楚山支点绘江天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:画面唯美,意深耐品,表达高度评价与赞美。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题三门峡市政府</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万里铺春,大地飞歌,市府率民寻富路;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">三门兴业,小龙赶考,初心勤政绘新篇。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:大笔咏赞,生动形象,三门峡市政府率民寻富路、勤政绘新篇的业绩呈于笔端。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十五、魏飞老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">励志联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">砺剑十年期破壁;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">扬帆万里待乘风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:铿锵有力,凌志之志,鼓舞人心。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红船精神</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">红船翻赤浪,马列领航,启梦百年兴伟业;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">热血践初心,工农树帜,开天一画指新程。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:好题材,好笔法,红船精神永励亿万人民。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">生子联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">玉种蓝田凝瑞霭;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">门生紫气引祥麟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以比喻手法祝贺生子之大喜,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.24《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">联斋群友2025上半年楹联集锦作品选评(十四)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十六、刘科元老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千红万紫新春画;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞莺歌乙巳图。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:虽中规中矩,却不乏新意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">风筝执意追云朵:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青草耐心等雨花。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:意象鲜活,春意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">改头换面迎春手;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">返老还童理发人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:平凡中蕴含大美,理发店联出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十七、张维社老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺西安市楹联学会五代会召开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五届征程,梦起长安千载韵;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">万般风彩,力耕联苑四时春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:起千载韵,耕四时春,意味深长,出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺兴平市楹联艺术家协会成立40周年暨七代会</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">四旬欣苦汉风振;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七届奋发唐韵飞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:四旬振汉风,七届飞唐韵,情深意美,耐品耐读。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题刘维刚金城印象</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">教育志中倾厚爱;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">汉唐韵里续新声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言精练,意韵丰满,意境阔远。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十八、王红敏老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">袁家村游客接待中心春联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">伴取烟霞春一角;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">迎来珠履客三千。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:新颖别致,诗意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏梨花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">心地似冰,千群玉女如明月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">肌肤胜雪,万树梨花压海棠。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:运用比喻,作比生动,梨花的姿容与魅力呈于面前,意境绚丽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题廉洁文化</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">怀若竹虚天地广;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">气如兰静水云闲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:用竹、兰的形象诠释廉洁,生动有力,联作出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六十九、李金梅老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">祝贺付贵宁先生个人书法展圆满成功</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笔吐书香萦雅客;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">诗吟景色恋春风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:热烈祝贺,高度评价,情真意厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">拜读《联斋刊登赵春恩2025年上半年楹联作品集锦》有感</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">写景书情生妙句;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">观今尚古出真知。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:体会深切,诠释赵春恩先生的佳作内涵,精妙。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">勉自己</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">六秩时光,教子持家勤续世;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一生感悟,修心养性德传家。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以德传家,教子有方,让人敬仰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">七十、席龙午老师</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宋志峻(峻岭)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">矢志颠峰,四叶花开妍满目;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">倾心峻岭,满山景美锦携风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以生动意象呈现,魅力无穷。嵌字自然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">婚联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">琴瑟和鸣,今天佳日两重喜;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鸳鸯合彩,百载良缘一线牵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:两重喜,一线牵,意韵深远,耐品。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">张爱莲(蓝雪)</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">爱馥诗联,蔷薇茁壮焕蓝雪;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莲芳书画,风釆欢欣辉牡丹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:句首嵌名,顺畅。鲜活景物衬出人之风采,好联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(22, 126, 251); font-size:22px;">(2025.7.26《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">联贺罗淑兰老人百岁华诞作品选评</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南南召 李青旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">胸中有爱,心底无私,天祝寿星腾紫气;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">与德为邻,和慈作伴,我歌宝婺写红联。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:天祝寿星腾紫气,由衷祝贺。我歌宝婺写红联,满怀深情。自对笔法运用出彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吉林扶余 孙汝瑛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">恭百岁诞辰,光耀马门,海屋添筹迎上寿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">行一方仁善,德扬梓里,华筵庆衍祝长春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:寿星光耀马门,德扬梓里,有贺有赞,联意丰厚。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海西宁 任正文</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海映奇葩,欣知德厚同明月;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">西宁添丽藻,喜报源长有寿星。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:青海老师祝贺本地寿星,愈显情深意重。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西绛县 杨明星</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">与人为善,与世无争,布衣蔬食添仙寿;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">心态平和,心胸宽阔,茅屋福缘逢百春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:自对和重字精巧,诠释寿星福寿自然切实。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陕西鄠邑 刘养启</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">母爱流辉,德耀八方,誉扬西海淑风暖;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">慈怀泽世,年高百岁,福佑后昆兰韵馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:遣词匠心,动词、形容词意味深长,为寿星祝寿添彩。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西平陆 刘科元</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">祝福掺入蛋糕,向老人寄去,百岁尝尝咱手艺;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">斟酒又吟赞语,暨长寿迎来,麻姑比比此慈萱。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔新颖别致,想象丰富,为寿星祝寿别一番意味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江西遂川 彭克云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宝婺星辉辉百载;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金萱花茂茂三秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:意象精美,顶针生动有味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南洛阳 毛利民</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">友善待人,馨香淑德声名远;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">平和处世,质朴兰心福寿长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:寿星声名远,福寿长,大贺大赞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江龙江 乔德红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">慈善为怀,期颐喜伴尊和孝;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">宽仁纳福,翰墨怡书寿与康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:期颐尊孝,翰墨寿康,呈现寿星魅力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吉林长春 刘志英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">百岁人,和善传家,德馨邻里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一生路,平凡处世,福满春秋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对寿星高度评价,热烈祝贺咏赞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南西峡 杨旭</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">积善,积德,积勤,积福寿百年齐茂;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">种慈,种爱,种俭,种儿孙五世同堂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:祝寿联出彩。精练句式,流畅韵美,重字别有地天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.7.29《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">诗贺罗淑兰老人百岁华诞作品选评</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江 郁犁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰老人百岁诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">虬枝焕彩庆期颐,岁岁犹歌幸福披。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹤发凝霜藏智慧,童颜映日展容仪。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">苍苍松柏馨如此,郁郁芝兰德若兹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笑看沧桑心自远,一轮明月即为诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描绘生动形象,意象鲜活,深刻展示寿星之美,令人敬仰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西太原 卫万荣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰老人百岁华诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">布衣蔬食乐寻常,心似春溪日夜长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">不识钱文无碍事,善缘结处自生香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语真意厚,诗赞寿星,平凡中呈现出不平凡。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西偏关 范荣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">百岁兰芳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">欣然百岁最无求,善果繁华满目收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大德高扬传万里,兰芳淑气已横流。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对寿星赞美有加。精巧的嵌名,颇富意味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南郑州 江孔顺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰老人百岁华诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">偷来太乙九皋松,赊得蓬莱千酿醲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一树蟠桃头顶举,母慈再寿百秋冬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:用仙界之物衬托寿星,美不胜收。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海西宁 李金梅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺伯母罗淑兰百岁华诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">亲和友善好人缘,淡利心宽福寿延。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">百岁欣观萱草灿,无争自律处桃源。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:萱草灿,桃源美,与寿星相辅相成,语意深长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南焦作 杨正温</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰老人百岁寿诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">谁堪一世受尊崇,塔尔飞花百岁红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">把酒千樽恭上寿,人生积德坦途通。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:德字闪光,寿星众人贺。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖北大冶 石钧</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰老人家百岁华诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湟水钟灵毓寿身,期颐笑看海扬尘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">长存睦里兰心馥,未了持家佛手亲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九畹滋荣三径露,百年修得满堂春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蟠桃宴启多巴镇,彤管争书贺牍新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔壮美,贺意真切,寿星形象栩栩如生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海西宁 赵春恩</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺马文旭先生慈母百岁华诞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">温颜意静秉持良,故里生缘自性香。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">内外贤明心境乐,方圆惠爱世情常。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">深恩淑景嘉祥祉,子孝兰风善岁长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">合德恒春身泰运,延年福寿体安康。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:对寿星热烈祝贺和赞颂,字里行间流露出真切与诚恳,诗意盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江 刘凤梅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">贺罗淑兰百岁寿辰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">松青岁晚乐无疆,百载晨光福满堂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹤舞云天歌婉转,仙葩献瑞寿绵长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:青松、晨光、舞鹤、仙葩……皆为寿星祝福,惟妙惟肖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.8.1《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">楹联里的学校作品选评</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">吉林扶余 孙汝瑛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">九江白鹿洞书院</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">始于唐,盛于宋,一脉书香,鹿鸣圣道文光远;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">圣道文光远;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">昭其礼,励其心,千秋师表,洞育良才国栋多。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:语言典雅,句式沉稳,寓意深远,极符书院之学风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江 傅贺楠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">咏清华大学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">荷塘映日,究数理精工,厚德修身,匠心独运兴科技;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">水木涵春,传中西睿智,砺行求是,壮志长怀济宇寰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔具体切实,生动有力,将清华大学的校容、氛围、课程、学风、贡献等呈现无余。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南济源 徐占元</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题小学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">知吃狮日筑新梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">加减乘除铸锦程。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:别致新颖地呈现出小学风貌。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南南召 李青旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题南召现代中学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">常怀使命,树蕙滋兰,复兴好梦师开路;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">永秉初心,乘风踏浪,托起新天德铸魂。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:以优美意象展现现代中学,寓意深刻,咏赞有加。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江西遂川 彭克云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题江西省遂川县戴家埔中学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">南风面下,栽桃育李耕耘久;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">右溪河旁,立德培根奉献多。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:美环境,好学校,情融其中,令人赞赏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山东新泰 和西典</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题山东大学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">百年风雨,合分分合渐兴隆,与时俱进成名校;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">各类人才,专秀秀专难计数,为国栽培塑美声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:热情描述,谢谢作者咏赞我的母校。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">陕西宝鸡 吴岱宝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">嵩阳书院</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">初为佛寺,继为玄门,终为书院,欣一教正芳,千秋峻极高嵩岳;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">景仰先师,崇仰涑水,追仰伊川,历九朝犹盛,二柏繁荣荫古今。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注:先师:大圣先师孔子,涑水:世称司马光为涑水先生,伊川:程颐世称伊川先生。二柏:三将军柏今剩二,故云。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:将书院的来龙去脉描述得淋漓尽致,将其内涵展现得具体细致。好笔法。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山东临清 扈金海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">临清市实验高中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书山辟径,学海泛舟,用青春筑梦,蟾宫折桂鳌头占;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">数载寒窗,十年板凳,让时代燃情,金榜题名圣殿登。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:精致的笔法,将其展示得生动细腻形象,让人敬慕。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江 乔德红 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">幼儿园</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">寓教于玩,绎童趣童真,缤纷花朵满园秀;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">启蒙在引,依自然自我,强壮根基历代严。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:优美的语言,将幼儿园描述得栩栩如生。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">江西 吴克丰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题张萌幼儿园</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">张翼抟风,小鸟学飞从地起;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">萌芽破土,幼苗拔节向天高。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:比喻生动形象,嵌字自然顺畅。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖北大冶 石钧</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题大冶实验中学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">元启新天,再启新程,龙飞凤翥八千里;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">旦瞻北极,夕瞻北斗,桂馥樟馨四十春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:构篇精致,融情描述,学校风貌让人点赞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西平陆 刘科元</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题幼儿园</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">跷跷板,滑滑梯,小小心灵筑大梦;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">棒棒糖,串串果,弯弯月亮坐飞船。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:优美的叠词,精彩地描绘,可爱可亲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">青海西宁 任正文</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题大通县特殊学校</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">社会关情,奋翼流声追雁影;</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">师生系念,随阳望斗踏鹏程。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:着笔特殊学校,视角恰切,意义深远。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.8.30《联斋》)</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">诗词里的学校作品选评</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;"> 孙福奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">河南南召 李青旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赞南召一中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">座落清清淯水边,百年名校育英贤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">教师筑梦传薪火,一片烛心摇亮天。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:前两句通俗,写该校位置,点明百年名校。后两句出彩,以生动意象展现该校贡献。构篇完整,脉络清晰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山西省新绛县 朱青龙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">题新绛县海泉高中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">海泉黉序耀河东,毓秀钟灵育俊雄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">十载寒窗凝浩气,三更灯火照苍穹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">书山砺志开新境,文浪飞舟破巨虹。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">待到信鸿传捷报,杏坛硕果映霞红。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:全诗以生动描绘见长,精美的语言勾画出学校姿容和魅力,达到咏赞目的。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">黑龙江哈尔滨 郁犁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">致肥东中等职业学校</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一技若修成,他乡可纵横。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">肥东能助力,职教重培英。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">善诱循循意,勤专日日荣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">时机如把握,幸运共长征。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:写职业学校,抓住“技”字,重点培养技能,抓到点子上。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">辽宁沈阳 李洪起</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赞沈阳市皇姑区昆山路第二小学校探索特色办学新途径</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">操持家务是课题,手脑动劳两相宜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">培栋雕梁有远识,亦为科技奠根基。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:这所学校探索特色办学新途径,给人启发,值得学习借鉴。谢谢作者的介绍。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山东新泰 和西典</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">聋哑学校</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">手语无声胜有声,交流之路爱铺平。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">成才报国遂心愿,脸似春花笑满盈。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:描述细腻形象,充满大爱,十分感人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山东临清 扈金海</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">聊城幼儿师范学校音乐系</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">琴声笛曲荡悠扬,管乐弦音奏韵芳。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">启迪童心彰特色,拓开幼智熠春光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:经作者之笔,将学校音乐系生动地介绍给读者。祝培养出更多音乐教师,引导儿童们走进美妙的音乐世界。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">湖北大冶 石钧</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">童园晨趣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">晨光缕缕吻花苞,稚步齐齐唱早谣。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">木塔堆成童话国,蜡涂染就彩虹桥。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">喳喳儿语孵春梦,耿耿师心映碧霄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日日园中藏宝趣,笑声总把绿篱超。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:谢谢作者的生动描述,似乎看到孩子们的幸福笑脸和喳喳儿语。好诗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">广西岑溪 黄已力</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">聋哑大学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">特殊大学育新苗,手语认知桃李迢。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">渝吉京津施教化,无声世界更妖娆。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注:聋哑人大学有:天津理工大学聋人工学院、吉林长春大学特殊教育学院、北京联合大学特殊教育学院、中国青年政治学院、金陵科技学院聋人特殊教育学院、绥化学院教育学院、重庆师范大学特殊教育学院、滨州医学院特殊教育学院、郑州师范学院特殊教育学院、南京特殊教育师范学院、陕西西安美术学院特殊教育学院、中央广播电视大学残疾人教育学院等。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:作者详细介绍了我国的特殊大学(聋哑大学)。这样的大学意义非凡,让人对其肃然起敬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山东济南 宋光明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">广播电视大学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">大地广开云课堂,荧屏启智墨飞扬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">千年教学添佳话,跨越时空育栋梁。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">简评:抓住广播电视大学的特点,描述真切,言简意丰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(22, 126, 251);">(2025.9.6《联斋》)</span></p>