<p class="ql-block">指导老师无为斋主人</p> 山清水秀风光美 <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025.5.14</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出题与点评老师赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">国强民富岁月甜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………～～～…………～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廉永明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">月朗星稀夜色幽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：图文并茂，景联绝配，对仗工整，佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘宽应</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳绿花红景色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相联。面对自然美景，视野更加开阔，令人赏心悦目。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">…………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">张期望</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳暗花明景色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，垂柳浓密，鲜花夺目，意境相关。唯觉柳暗花明有经历曲折，迊来转机之意，与山青水秀结构上略有差异。（个见）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对 句：鸟语花香气象新。 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 一一郭保旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对仗工整，意境相联，上下联合成勾勒出一幅春夏之交山川秀美的天然图景，令人赏心悦目，心向往之。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">…………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁金翠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">草嫩花香景色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：对仗工整，意境相联。唯觉山青水秀是成语，並列主谓结构，而草嫩花香並非成语，对应方面略显欠缺。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">…………………～～～～～</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">温丕彪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">物阜民安日月新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境深化。国内物质丰富，人民安居乐业，岁月日新月异。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郝建富</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳绿花香气象新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相联。上下联协调自然。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">谷阜民丰社稷新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境深化。五谷丰登，民众富裕，祖国和谐发展，事业欣欣向荣。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">谷阜民丰社稷新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境深化。五谷丰登，民众富裕，祖国和谐发展，事业欣欣向荣。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………～……～…</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵文英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">海阔天空旷野春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境关联。从另一个角度勾勒出春天的美景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">…………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁小彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">雨顺风调粟米丰。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境加深。唯觉雨顺风调顺序颠倒，一般习惯性成语，不应次序更替。（个见）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">下期作业：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨淡花香岫色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相联。写出了作者醉心画作，留恋春色的执着之情！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">许晋武</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日丽风和景象新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">柳绿桃红画意浓。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">两对句均对仗工整，意境优美。尤其是第二对句寓意贴切，更尤突出。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王海良作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">物阜民丰日子甜。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰诗联</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">联题母亲节</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">相夫教子，煮饭缝衣，恩深似海三千尺；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">勤俭谦和，睦邻敬老，德厚如山九万重。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句一句，对仗工整，意境深化。唯觉日子一词有点口语感，俗化了点，力度欠足（个见）</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">自撰挽联，对仗合律，意境深沉。母爱情深，父恩如山，不失为两位老人均离世后的挽联佳作。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">草软花繁笑语融。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境优美。柔软的草坪，繁杂的鲜花，伴随着游人的欢声笑语，美景如画，佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">崔晓清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">墨染诗吟笑语长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相关，写出了作者痴迷书画，吟诗赋词的陶醉乐趣！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">……………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程永红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">日丽风和景色新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相联。山青水秀加之风和日丽，正是出游观景的好时机。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘建和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">彩重墨浓图画新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">平仄合律，意境更新，浓笔重彩勾勒出美丽的画图。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">…………………………</b></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">武达</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">山青水秀风光美：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">地阔天高眼界宽。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对仗工整，意境相关。面对大好河山，视野更加开阔，令人赏心悦目。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">一.出句对句</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">山青水秀风光美；</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">二.自撰诗联</b></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p>