莺啼翠柳迎朝日 <p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">一、出句对句</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">二.</b></p><p class="ql-block"><b style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">自撰诗联</b></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2025.5.7</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出题与点评老师程永红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px; color:rgb(237, 35, 8);">………………～～～～………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵文英</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕话桃红研画声。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕语桃红艳画屏；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">又见平遥城脚下，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">欢声歌舞溢温馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评: 平仄相对，“翠柳”“桃红”宽对，“研画声”不知其意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………～～～～～～……………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">霍成奎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞春风送暖晖。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：上下联共同渲染春天的温馨，春风/翠柳宽对，下联暖晖若换一种写法就更好了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………～～～……………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程树兰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹤舞苍松拥锦霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评：形对意联，统一和谐的画面，给人一种诗意的感受。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">廉永明</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日，鹭戏清波映晚晖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">注，春暖花开汾河畔天鹭飞翔，好一美景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，动静相衬，画面感强。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0); font-size:22px;">………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘宽应</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迊朝日：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞青云送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:音韵和谐，生动欢愉的自然画面。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">武达</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞长空醉暖春。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:形对意联，音韵和谐，共同描绘春日生机盎然景色，营造明快欢悦的意境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郝建富</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪清波染晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，生动形象，画面美好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">下期作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">浪卷金鳞揽晓烟。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰诗联:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">客旅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">灯昏酒醉依乡月，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">笛怨魂销梦戍边。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，视听结合，通过“揽”拟人化动作，赋予自然景物灵动感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁小彬</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迊朝日：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹭立苍礁赏绮霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:形象拟人，描绘了春日清晨的生机与宁静。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">梁金翠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝶戏黄花恋暖风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:音韵和谐，勾勒出莺歌蝶舞，柳翠花开，阳光明媚的晨景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">许晋武</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迊朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞红桃沐晓风。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:运用拟人，动静结合，描绘春日清晨生机盎然的景象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赵显勇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕舞蓝天送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，音韵和谐，给人春天万物复苏，和谐欢愉的氛围感。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">……………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句：莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">对句：鹤舞青松唱碧霄。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;"> 一一郭保旺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:形对意联，清新高雅，自然和谐，生机盎然，富有诗意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">张期望</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕啄春泥到我家。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，构思巧妙，描绘了春日生机盎然的景象。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">郭彩萍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪和风沐绮霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:形象生动，富有动态美感和诗意，春天充满生机和希望。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鱼戏青荷逐晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:形象、生动、细腻，展现了自然界的生机与和谐。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">冀雅玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鱼戏青荷醉夕辉。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:这联“醉”字用的恰到好处。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………～……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">刘建和</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕戏黄花恋晚晴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">自撰诗联:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">五绝《春语》</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕戏黄花恋晚晴。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一派春光无限好，</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">唯期日月更温馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，形对意联，音韵和谐，画面生动，生机盎然。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">崔晓清</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鸬舞蓝波送暮光。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:两联都对仗工整，形对意联，自然和谐，生机勃勃。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">…………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">阴彩桃</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹊唱芳庭送锦书。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，想象丰富，万物复苏，喜庆祥和，春日温馨。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(255, 138, 0); font-size:22px;">………………………………</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">温丕彪</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">燕剪彤云送晚霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:对仗工整，形对意联，音韵和谐，画面生动，形象美好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~"</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">王海良作业</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">1.出句对句:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">鹤舞青松醉睌霞。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">2.自撰诗联:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">赏油菜花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">一一步韵李会长五律·小雨次日赏油莱花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">夜雨洗香尘，田畴十里新。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">花开飞鸟喜，蕊绽舞蜂勤。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">金浪香迷客，翠波韵喜人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">今虽归故梓，梦意醉三分。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评:通过莺、鹤、枊、松意象，以生灵与景物的和谐共舞，描绘一幅生机盎然，超脱尘世的自然画卷。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="color:rgb(237, 35, 8); font-size:22px;">~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">出句对句</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">程永红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">莺啼翠柳迎朝日；</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">蝶舞晴光绕竹门。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评： 彩蝶飞舞，晴光洒照，柴扉竹门，好一幅农家宜居的质朴画图。使人如临其境，耐人寻味。佳作当赞！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:22px;">点评老师赵显勇</span></p>