<p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顺序1</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陈果果</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫砂壶吞吐云雾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">往事在杯中沉浮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">慢饮人间清欢 忘却烦扰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 整体虚实结合，修辞运用也不错，感觉稍欠缺的一是“紫砂壶”与“杯”没有错开，二是结尾的“忘却烦忧”太实了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/丹霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">你的苦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">罐中煮沸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">人生的甜用心品味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 这个“你”仿佛故人。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/康秀炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一缕清香在舌尖起舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">品山品水品风月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">以草木之名 入禅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 三个“品”有味，“入禅”彰显禅意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/卢春杰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">干活回来 泡一壶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">细品 慢饮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">微香醉人 笑容在脸上绽开</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微香，确实醉人！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 文/古道白杨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">泡上一壶翠云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">色香味 燎人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">心中早泛滥着春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 这一壶翠云，当真撩人！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/东方虹雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">煮一盏清风</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">细品 沉浮过往</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">缕缕都是 铿锵的人生</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 茶里人生，细品才更有味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/老妖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">背着一袋文字跑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">八旬翁善意提醒 悠着点嘛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">手指树 息会或许有所悟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 戏剧化的诗作，读起来妙趣横生。悟，当是妙法。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顺序2</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/苇强</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">热水泡开一叶叶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">绿色精华</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">让人品悟，杯中翻滚的哲学</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:末行"哲学"一词用在这里，太笼统，太大，太泛，太硬。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 文/岐麟散人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一叶浮沉 命系杯中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">滚烫里舒展半生褶皱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">回甘处 藏着起落的相逢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:以杯中茶叶为象，感悟人生！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文／吉新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一朵玫瑰沸腾了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">杯子托起它</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">杯子之外的人，沉溺进去</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:前两行不管是用拟人还是双关，还是谐音"杯子"即"辈子"，诣在描出诗人的专注及神思的微变，为末行作铺垫，基于此，末行有感而发，含蓄耐品！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/蔡厚炳</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">倒出一杯乡愁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">细品 醇香里</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">有母亲额头流下的微咸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:一首起于心节的诗，只有诗人自己知道自己深刻，关于故乡关于母亲，往事历历！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">道是无晴/河北</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">村头，没有四壁的空调屋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一人从鼾声中坐起</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">看太阳西斜，下田去了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:关注农民的生活劳作状态，麦收农忙时节，某天下午，天气炎热，一农民柳荫下乘凉休息，等错过高温，就急匆匆下田去了。通篇只描不说，表达对农民的关注与同情！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/付光渝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">独坐庭院 明月清风里</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">泡一杯香茗</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">品味人生沉浮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:夏夜里，诗人宁静地"独坐庭院 明月清风里″，惬意地"泡一杯香茗/品味人生沉浮"，表达出了诗人内心的清爽、淡雅、通透！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文 / 绿色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">几片云在荷叶间匍匐</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">偷听岸边的私语，忽然</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">知了扯着嗓子叫了起来</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:"私"，"丝"也，通篇拟人生动！</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顺序3</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/空谷幽兰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">黄发对弈垂髫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柔丝万千缕</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">捋不清楚河与汉界</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：柳荫之下</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">，以“黄发对弈垂髫”构建温馨场景，充满童趣与生活气息，展现柳荫下的闲适与朦胧意境。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/小乙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一片龙井两叶毛尖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清明里洇开三生绻眷</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">浸透相思的诗笺</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：用龙井、毛尖两种茶叶，结合“清明”“三生绻眷”，将茶与情感、时光串连，以茶泡开相思诗笺，表达出绵长的思亲之情。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/阳光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">午后 煮沸一壶铁观音</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">与你对饮</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">细品人生滋味</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：描绘出午后与友人对饮一杯清茶的画面，将品茶与品味人生相联系，引发读者对人生的思考。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/森林雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">最喜欢在水岸坐禅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风叠翠影悠悠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">化作一尾尾小鱼儿的青纱帐</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：以“水岸坐禅”营造静谧氛围，赋予柳荫灵动之美，展现出自然和谐的禅意与生机，“青纱帐”意象让人生发联想。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/剑风使者</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一壶云霞蒸腾，岁月翻滚</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">满喉飘香里</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沁出春前细雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：微诗有画面与动态感，通过茶香沁出“春前细雨”，将品茶体验与季节意象相结合，韵味悠长。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/赵正霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">借一间小屋 栖息</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">梳理几份燥热 让心降温</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">回归 若初</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：借柳荫下小屋，以梳理燥热、让心降温，表达回归自然本真的心境向往，写出诗人对宁静内心世界的追求。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/巴山一松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">丝绦，织了一河岸</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">久不下雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">长影帮不了摇动的蒲扇，情蔫儿</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：首句有画面感。二句结合当下久旱情境而写，末句拟人化书写，“情蔫儿”巧妙点出盼雨的急切与怅惘。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/吴琳玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">枝叶轻摇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">拂过岁月的眉梢</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">将绿意 种进初夏的诗行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读：有画面感，描绘出柳枝叶轻摇拂之状，末句以灵动之笔让柳荫充满诗意。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">顺序4</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶 韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/晗羲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沉浮清影间，烟色浓</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">四季飘雪，清爽中苦而甘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">悠闲， 一盏时光沉淀</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微诗有泡茶沉浮之状，有品茶苦而甘之味，更有时光中的悠闲。不要过于凝炼，有点不好理解。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/雪儿怀春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">龙井一壶热气儿腾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">乡音未改仍续存情谊</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">清香入口慢嚼那生活节奏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 有了细节，就有了画面，首尾两句都不错。如果句式来点变化会更好。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/张士杰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">枯叶在喉间 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">种出清泉 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">往事 忽然甜了</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 简洁而有意思的一首。描写看似平淡，却又不失新意，尾句让人回味，这茶韵也就有了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳荫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/ 江南风</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">垂下枝条，浓密得像妈妈怀抱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一滴汗呼吸均匀</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小憩在，游子的呓语中</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微诗紧扣诗题，既有画面，又有故事，还有情结，朴实无华的文字巧妙串珠！喜欢！</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">茶韵</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/往往醉后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">沸水 舒展蜷缩的心事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一叶一叶沉浮间</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">把岁月 酿成舌尖上的诗篇</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">巴山一松简评：</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 微诗前两句写实，写泡茶之形态，尾句提升不错，有了诗意的岁月，茶韵也就到水到渠成。</span></p>