<p class="ql-block">@所有人</p><p class="ql-block">华夏微型诗社第537期周周发同题创作开始了。</p><p class="ql-block"> 欢迎诗友们参与微型诗写作!请早日构思打磨!</p><p class="ql-block">备注:</p><p class="ql-block">1、投稿、收稿时间:</p><p class="ql-block">4月8日晚上7点——10点。</p><p class="ql-block">2、每人选投一首微型诗。</p><p class="ql-block">3、请单独发帖,不要自行接龙,由巴山一松老师统一收稿。</p><p class="ql-block">4、稿件选编到美篇,并由诗社老师予以点评。</p><p class="ql-block">5、本期题目:</p><p class="ql-block">①《自恋》 </p><p class="ql-block">②《春曲》</p><p class="ql-block">6.出题老师:二海</p><p class="ql-block">7、交流时可交流两首,投稿时只选投一首,收稿只收一首,点评也只点评一首。</p><p class="ql-block">8.优秀作品推荐“微诗坊”。</p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/小乙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">辨识嫩芽芽附点</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">唱响绿色的歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一只风筝飙出了高音</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 诗人选用新奇的意象,将春天的生机勃勃以灵动笔触展现,画面感强。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春 曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/赵正霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">东风抛出几粒鸟鸣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">催化冰凌 掰开七色花瓣 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">跃动的轻音乐 淌过心房</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 把春天比作轻音乐,写出春天带来的心灵触动,语言富有张力。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/付光渝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">道理我都懂 可听到</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">别人喊美女</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">还是忍不住回头</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 直白的语言,道出听到喊“美女”的心态,展现人内心深处的触动。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/吉新</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">草原是我的。草原如果卷起来</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">里面那个姑娘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">也是我的</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 想象大胆独特,将草原与姑娘融为一体归为“己”有,凸显强烈的自我意识,大手笔大气势,豪迈中尽显自恋。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/八乡人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">墙角的桃花散落</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">不知是笑</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">还是唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 借“墙角桃花散落”,以疑问引发思考,表达春天的情绪,令人回味。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 自 恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 文/晗羲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春天这位魔术师,把我化成绿叶</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">开出鲜花,究竟是叶美</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">还是花美?是叶香还是花香</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 以叶、花之美之香的对比追问,巧妙表达出对自身美的欣赏。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/周其林</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小渔村变成大都市</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一个老人画个圈的故事</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">就传唱开来</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 首句以深圳变化起笔,二三句尽现春天的故事,礼赞伟大的祖国,写出不一样的春曲。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/陈兴茂</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">惠风奏响生命欢歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小溪吻醒山间野花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">轻轻诉衷情 低声道密语 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">岐麟散人浅读:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 用拟人手法描绘台春天的温柔与盎然生机,满是柔情、浪漫与对美好的歌唱。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/执着</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">心理年龄,永远只有十八岁</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">快乐是我的代名词</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">美容,在微笑中完成</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 主题似乎有点偏贬义,诗人另辟新意,面对一切,倡导快乐,这是精神取向,值得人们深思!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/丹霞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小河叮咚唱起了歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">和黄莺比赛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">陶醉的蜜蜂静候桃杏枝头</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 春天来了,残冬消融,″小河叮咚唱起了歌",诗人用拟人的手法,美好的向往,轻松愉悦的心态起笔,大动声色,春意盎然!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/东方虹雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">东风 奏响柳笛</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">池塘里蛙鼓配乐</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一首大合唱 写进谷雨诗行</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> "东风"、″柳笛","蛙鼓","谷雨"大合唱,取点典型精准,一扫暮春时节"清明时节雨纷纷"的沉闷,清新脱俗。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/绿色</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一只乌鸦对着镜子</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">摆出各种姿势,引来很多相机围拍</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">更洋洋得意</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 诗人以"乌鸦"意象为底色,寓意耐品!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 文/岐麟散人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">三月 百花打翻调色盘</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">红紫蓝白肆意晕染</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">大地欢歌 奏响耕作的序章</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 春曲无处不响,诗人以浪漫的情怀,以农耕的视角,肆意的笔法,奏响春天!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春 曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 文/行天</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">山河已无恙</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">游人信步坦途</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">绿屏花影中几声鸟鸣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 真是行天,行天下大事!″山河已无恙″,这五个大字,写出来是激动,是荣幸,″已"彰自信,更是骄傲!尤其那个"几"字,若为陈述句,那是宁静,就在我们伟大的祖国,若叩天一问,问荡宕的世界和平,几何!!!???立足雄视,立意呼吁!善意中温文尔雅,有气质,犹如拂来~~华春莹~~,好诗!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/阳帽雨伞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">小草拟谱 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳弄丝弦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鸟儿结伴赠恋歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 入微亦可人,行行拂诗意!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/绿柳枫</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">鸟鸣打开广播系统</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">三月的电台</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">便一键调至花香频道</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">赤道雪域简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 首行,仿佛翻卷孟浩然诗云:春眠不觉晓,处处闻啼鸟,不绝于耳。本首诗人尝试着植入现代化的名词:广播系统,电台,频道,推陈出新,致敬!个人弱弱的建议,这些名词,写诗不一定全搬出来,甚至相互涵盖,诗人与读者应像一对暗恋的情人,意中皆懂即可,尤其微型诗。我也是门外汉,不影响我一直以来对诗人绿柳枫对诗的理解与尊敬!</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/墨客吟</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">几粒鸟鸣串起一张张笑靥</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">谱写新歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">回馈大地母亲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 有鸟鸣,也有曲,表达出春天的意象。个人感觉是平了,缺乏独特的语言和感受。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/雪儿怀春</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">从那朵浪花带我飘荡</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">容下诸多嘲弄忍受无数抨击</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">爱在坚持文字游园寻乐趣</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 贵在坚持。看过一句话,有意义的快乐就是幸福,送给你了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/喜阳柳保宅</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">桃枝绽粉</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">燕语裁云</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风把希望播种</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 有桃有燕还有风,这样的春曲挺应景。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/家乡小河</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一朵桃花,和风儿一起舞蹈</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">对着阳光眯眼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">对蜜蜂说着“不要”</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 恋,就包括了选择,也包括了拒绝,“不要”也可视为宣言了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/康秀炎</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">柳笛嘟嘟地吹出前奏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">燕子一遍遍在水面调音</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">百灵对着阳光的五彩谱视唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 不错的春曲,元素齐全。个感不如抓住一个意象深入挖掘,抒发自己独特的感受。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/随风</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">读镜子里的我</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">乐开花</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">原来这么帅气</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 自信还是该有的,毕竟自己已经很努力了。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/空谷幽兰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">碧叶婆娑,姗姗筛日影</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">燕子穿梭期间</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">诉说旧日悄悄话</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 婆娑、穿梭、悄悄话,有这些词语就感觉成功了。尤其“筛日影”,精彩独到,富有新意。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/巴山一松</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">花朵,先后从画里走出来</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">让位人影一角</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">交由蜜蜂酿造甜蜜,流水甩膀子歌唱</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">紫塞长风简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 走、让、酿造,运用很精彩,“甩膀子歌唱”新颖独到,让人眼前一亮。</span></p> <p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/阳光</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">播种机鸣唱 </span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">土地欣喜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">希望 垄上飞出</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 春耕情景,有欣喜,有希望。惬意之情,不言而喻。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 在新意上,还需加强。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">林汉梁/南昌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">成年起脸蛋迷人</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">学习生活懒惰</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">多次相亲无果最终……</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 抓住一点,进行深入联想。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/苇强</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一朵桃花,抛了一个媚眼</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">瞬间,心湖荡漾</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一片片的嫣红</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 借花喻人、寓情。还需深入。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/森林雨</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">座座青山如琴,条条绿水似弦</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风雨协奏</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一季江山花月夜</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 语言美!但语言必须靠内容、内涵和思想去支撑。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/吴琳玲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">花香与微风共舞</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">笑语满枝</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">相思 又一年</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 这首构思简单,却给人新鲜感觉。用拟人手法,写景,结尾转抒情。有诗味!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/老妖</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">风轻吻枝头低言嘱咐</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">登台莫误魅力无限</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">携袋中迷香结伴同行方受宠</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">咋夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 三行叙述,似乎没纳入一个统一的氛围、境界,框架之中。抓住一点联想、想象即可。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">自恋</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">江南风/杭州</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">毁林,又一地皮榨出了油</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">枯腐的界桩上</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">一只鸟,唱着那时的歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">咋夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 好!让人眼前一亮的一首。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 立意深,构思圆熟、巧妙!作者探讨了一个重大,深刻的主题:“毁林”。尾盘的隐喻,耐咀嚼,回味无穷!</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> 江南风微诗,不靠语言花哨吸引读者,而是靠立意、内容、内涵。</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">春曲</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">文/往往醉后</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">燕子归来时 呢喃些烟花三月</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">河岸那柳 便用柔情</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">谱出了飘逸的歌</span></p><p class="ql-block"><br></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;">昨夜星简评:</span></p><p class="ql-block"><span style="font-size:20px;"> “燕子”“烟花三月”河岸柳”美好的三月,让人心情愉悦。</span></p>