1.七绝·上川岛揽胜<br data-filtered="filtered">王怀尧<br data-filtered="filtered">（一）<br data-filtered="filtered">上川岛上鹭鸥翔，海与山连气势昂。<br data-filtered="filtered">只见风车迷目处，骚人笔下醉汪洋。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确，转合的有点陡。个见！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（二）<br data-filtered="filtered">惊涛滾滾醉眸呆，帆影翩翩意景开。<br data-filtered="filtered">浪吻朝霞邀远客，风光旖旎似蓬莱。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确。意景，意境？首句有凑韵之嫌。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（三）<br data-filtered="filtered">碧海蓝天景色奇，追波快艇水中驰。<br data-filtered="filtered">数声鸣笛数声韵，一路风光一路诗。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确，数字改为几字体会一下怎么样？<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（四）<br data-filtered="filtered">留连岛上尽徘徊，望海船行碧水开。<br data-filtered="filtered">一缕霞辉光艳艳，千帆破浪日边来。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确，整个布局尚可，词语可进一步精炼。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>（五）<br data-filtered="filtered">此行欢悦满心头，一路诗情寄水流。<br data-filtered="filtered">墨客台山寻胜境，今朝川岛乐春游。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】格律准确，表达了春游胜境的喜悦心情。感谢赐稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>2.沁园春·采风巨龙湖<br data-filtered="filtered">霍元<br data-filtered="filtered">气爽风清，光和景明，友聚谊诚。贺高山流水，圣湖掠影；承唐继宋，敬友尊朋。静赏鱼姿，闲观鹤影，古韵新声诗意泓。初心驻，品书香格律，文苑争鸣。<br data-filtered="filtered">开机摄像留型，调焦距、语轻惬意萦。看天鹅振翅，鹭鸶梳羽，征鸿停渚，信鸽栖亭。传令飞花，寻幽览胜，法水师山享世荣。豪情壮，颂如歌岁月，国粹传承。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】本词牌共有 7 种格式，作品采用的格式是 格一苏轼（孤馆灯青）：双调一百十四字，前段十三句四平韵，后段十二句五平韵，词格准确。这首沁园春在用词上古朴与现代结合，情景交融，气势恢宏。写在春和景明的季节，诗人们湖边采风的情景，赏景抒情并叙，很有代入感。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>3.【中吕·苏武持节】京通运河<br data-filtered="filtered">张东升<br data-filtered="filtered">长河水路，漕船如鹜，京通一线生财富。丈藤粗，四肢枯，万民劳作流年负。华夏开天惊壮举。功，载帝书；名，耀圣图。<br data-filtered="filtered">(丈藤：拉纤用的不沾水的粗绳。)<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】 "丈藤粗"与"四肢枯"形成强烈反差，既展现运河经济动脉作用，又揭示其背后的民生劳苦。"功，载帝书；名，耀圣图"用互文手法，暗含对历史书写的反思。感谢赐稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>4.如梦令·春香<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀清（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">帘外日高风暖。细草烟波拍岸，翠鸟柳枝啼，几树花开娇软。香远。香远。花影暗藏深院。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑天瑶点评】意境优美，充满春天的气息，首句拉开镜头，交代时间空间，鸟鸣与花开交相呼应，春意盎然，尾句有庭院深深深几许的悠然感，花香沁人心脾！感谢赐稿！<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">5.七绝·觅香<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀清（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">堤边踱步觅芳春，未见新林香染身。<br data-filtered="filtered">切盼今时花绽蕊，方能树下笑声频。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，语言简练而富有韵味，整体风格清新自然。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>6.【当日推荐】七绝·路灯<br data-filtered="filtered">付秀明（晚霞）<br data-filtered="filtered">长街短巷挺纤身，何慕初阳暖玉尘。<br data-filtered="filtered">四季风霜皆不屑，欣同明月照归人。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，以拟人笔法塑路灯品格，“挺”、“慕”、“屑”等动词运用增强了画面感。构思精当。"挺纤身"显风骨，"暖玉尘"稍欠明晰，可酌。时空意象交织（街巷/四季，明月/归人）见巧思，末句升华温暖意蕴足。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">7.七绝·春日寻芳（新韵）<br data-filtered="filtered">赫安泽<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">暖日寻芳兴致深，多情光景使人新。<br data-filtered="filtered">山清柳绿喜盈眼，溪水潺潺还数春。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确，通过对春日美景的细腻描绘，展现对美好事物的向往。意境优美，情感真挚。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">8.春日书怀<br data-filtered="filtered">刘成华<br data-filtered="filtered">孤灯挑尽砚冰滋，汉魄唐魂沁墨池。<br data-filtered="filtered">垂露悬针参篆籀，偃波折股悟神奇。<br data-filtered="filtered">毫端吞吐三更月，袖里空藏五色丝。<br data-filtered="filtered">且把幽怀付乌玉，松烟笑我作书痴。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】作品格律准确,对仗工整，整首诗流露出一种对书法艺术的热爱与追求，表达了对传统文化的敬仰。砚冰：砚水冻成的冰。墨池指砚。垂露、悬针为竖的两种写法。</div><div>偃波即偃波书，即版书，状如连文，为颁发诏命所用。折股：“折钗股”的笔法，指转折处的虽弯曲盘绕仍圆润饱满，将转折节点隐藏起来的点画。五色丝的五色代表五行，五色线之俗源于我国古代的五行观念，古代崇尚五色，以五色为吉祥色。乌玉玦：墨的别名。松烟指墨。篆籀：篆文和籀文。全诗墨香透纸，文人意趣横生。专业术语稍显匠气，普通读者易生隔膜；而且砚、墨的意象重复，"五色丝"意象稍显突兀。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>9.采桑子·桃之夭夭<br data-filtered="filtered">张清彬<br data-filtered="filtered">人间三月芳菲竞，灼灼桃花。满径芬葩，风过枝摇香漫涯。<br data-filtered="filtered">武陵曾记迷人处，梦绕红霞。浅笑无邪，引得诗心醉物华。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑李继红点评】词的用韵和节奏流畅，整体语言清新自然，通过对桃花的描绘，展现了春天的生机与美好，同时也蕴含了对过往美好时光的怀念。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">10.七绝·接龙<br data-filtered="filtered">雒少华<br data-filtered="filtered">遥望南天屡上楼，白云抽絮纺纱悠。<br data-filtered="filtered">织成绮秀女工美，裁就相思暗自羞。<div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑孟宪丽点评】七绝一首，合律。”裁就相思暗自羞。”出彩。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">11.沁园春·春日壮怀<br data-filtered="filtered">李长江<br data-filtered="filtered">大地回春，冰河解冻，锦鳞戏塘。看柳枝云舞，轻舟荡桨；瑶池月映，雅士寻芳。逸韵风烟，欢声波浪，瞻望飘云且起行。心情爽，赋新词颂咏，任志飞扬。<br data-filtered="filtered">梦思锦绣时光，韶华季、览书映雪窗。志心怀报国，投身军旅；情思卫土，折柳家乡。岁月如流，初心不忘，破浪长风逐远航。展前路，待宏图大展，再谱华章。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑孟宪丽点评】沁园春一阕，豪迈，磅礴，有春日生发之气象。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>12.水调歌头·十年耕耘六万诗丰（格一毛滂体）<br data-filtered="filtered">赫安泽<br data-filtered="filtered">传承于今夕，博雅写惊奇。十年勤奋掾笔，持续展旌旗。六万珠玑挥洒，五百凤凰栖处，雅韵滿方蹊。遥峰出青染，芳草尽香迷。<br data-filtered="filtered">流韵美，词赋醉，正逢时。满园丰盛，花蕊吐艳正如期。荣继唐风宋雨，墨泌龙章凤藻，心旷满神怡。携手登山唱，眺望彩星驰。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑孟宪丽点评】水调歌头一阕，词作恢宏大气，赞颂了博雅诗人笔耕不辍的向上精神。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">13.七绝•春思（通韵）<br data-filtered="filtered">高宝霞（郝好）<br data-filtered="filtered">细柳随风逐日新，夭桃吐艳景迷人。<br data-filtered="filtered">众生莫道花期短，岁月长河绿意深。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑孟宪丽点评】全诗合律合韵。起承转合自然，满满春意。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">14.七绝•春景（通韵）<br data-filtered="filtered">高宝霞（郝好）<br data-filtered="filtered">无边陌野换新装，一片耕图入画廊。<br data-filtered="filtered">待到春风吹雨后，青芽破土韵悠长。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">【编辑孟宪丽点评】全诗合律合韵。清新，上口，尽显初春的气息。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered">15.七绝·南运河迎春花<br data-filtered="filtered">鄢一丹<br data-filtered="filtered">晓寒嫩蕊吐鹅黄，瘦蔓低垂吻草香。<br data-filtered="filtered">莫道春归无觅处，一湾花影醉东皇。<br data-filtered="filtered"><br data-filtered="filtered"><div>【编辑刁宁点评】这首绝句笔法细腻，灵动。前两句近描迎春花之身柔意坚，转句化用白诗"春归无觅处"却指春来，"一湾花影"以远景之灿烂写春之鲜活。意脉因转句略不畅，首二句已经写春归，转句无由。</div><div><br data-filtered="filtered">16.五绝·江南春岸<br data-filtered="filtered">万劲波<br data-filtered="filtered">轻舟摇绿水，粉女笑迎霞。<div>石板深幽巷，小哥卖杏花。<br data-filtered="filtered"></div></div><div><br data-filtered="filtered"></div><div>【编辑刁宁点评】尾句孤平。诗境婉约飘逸，造语轻俊妩媚。</div></div></div>